As Our Souls Waltz

This is what my heart had to say today... I am not sure why or where this came from, but...

 

 

 

Let my soul dance with yours...

In crimson, under an azure moon

While blossoming sunlight twinkles in my eyes...

Bowing at my waist, while delicate satin slippers

Cover my feet that carefully perform to your liking.

Ribbons of splendor entangle my ankles...

While floating on a cloud of simile,

And metaphoric movements paint a reality so lovely.

Let my soul dance with yours...

In lavender, Under chartreuse starlight

While heaven rests on the edge of your fingertips...

My hands all to eager, to know yours intimately,

Searching broad shoulders that become a shelter for my eternity.

My head on your chest finds, peace...

While blissful creations of imagination glide,

A happy ending collides with our right now.

Let my soul dance with yours...

In goldenrod, under a fuchsia sun

While bursting like spring buds on cherry blossom tree.

Swaying to your melody, yearning for our oneness,

Passing all outer layers until our hearts yoke, perfectly

bronzed to become the art of all ages. 

 

 

Reviews

[Barbara Walker]

Rhythm, simile's and metaphor's, flowing from your pen and heart with beautiful imagery to create a beautiful poem that is going in my favorite's! Barbara

[Moonlit-Blues]

Beautiful, but a bit too much sparkling stuff - stands out to be very jittery and somewhat frivulous. Overpowering I think is the word I'm looking for. Beautifully worded though. Lovely poem. Adding to favourites.

[Spilled Her Guts in Cur..]

this was really well written. Rich in beautiful imagery and overlapping metaphors along with the way the poem flowed with a really nice sweeping rhythm (similar do dancing...?).

[Kena Dawn Augustine]

I like it. You creat great imagrey, and it appears to me you go the paper and just let the words come easily from your mind. that's true poetry, when it flows, and others can relish the beauty. anyway, added you as a friend.

[J.P.O.et]

Wow, really intense imagery and yes like the use of color
'Passing all outer layers until our hearts yoke, perfectly'
That is such a different perspect. or way of conveying this
and I like it Great write
J.P.O.et

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What an amazing font of creativity you've got lodged in that head of yours! This is a splendid palette of color and emotion. It's vividly visual, and puts the reader firmly in that place and those moments.

Outstanding write!

[R J Askew]

This is delightful. It evokes images of physical and emotional flow...and great colour. The repetition of the key line works well to drive the thought home, but not too heavily, and is a thread which holds the poem together. I could 'hear' piano music when I read this...Chopin perhaps. Bowing, floating, searching, swaying, bursting...marvellous verbery! And the images are just as good, especially the ribbons and the 'chatreuse starlight'. And the 'happy ending colliding with right now'...yes! yes! It is a very happy poem and made this reader feel the better for reading it.

[Mr. Deft Diction]

You might be the illest that very few have heard of.

Let my soul dance with yours...
In lavender, Under chartreuse starlight
While heaven rests on the edge of your fingertips...

You shouldn't even do this sort of thing to people. Definitely an ode to beauty, classically.

[forfila]

Wow, you take my breath away sweet one, each and every time =)