Fade

Fade

A Poem by Alexandra W
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'Dear me' poem

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I have heard more birds than you,
singing in more springs.
I have seen more morning dew
On petals, and dragonfly wings.

I have said more empty words.
thought more thoughts.
dreamed more dreams.
I have hurt more hearts than you,
Brought stinging tears
And screams.

Everything that you could see, 
you captured in your eyes.
Staring out through cloudy time,
A veil of gossamer sky. 
Each melody and whispered word
You trapped inside your mind.
You caged them up like tender birds
Some restless, dim, or blind.

I don’t have much to say to you
To guide your raindrop feet.
I’ve lost the bits and pieces
Where past and present meet.

But Spring won’t last forever,
And you, you'll fade away.
Time will seep into your bones
With every draining day.

Friends will turn to strangers
Wounds will fade to scars,
Candy turns to alcohol
And bikes turn into cars.

Secrets lose their shining charm
And start to swell with shame.
Pain is more than scraped-up knees,
And War is not a game.

Holding hands turns into sex,
You lie awake in bed,
The monsters in your closet
Move to fill your head.
The mirror is more than shiny glass,
Your face is painted on.
People only look for you
When all of you is gone.

Every autumn, blossoms fold
Then bloom again in May.
They’re new again despite the cold
But you, you'll die away.

Time will swirl beneath your skin
And dull your eyes and speech.
The summer light will grow less sweet
And the past falls out of reach.

So breathe, breathe in your youth’s perfume
And watch its colors brim.
Keep quiet freshness close to you,
Until the world grows dim.

© 2018 Alexandra W


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Alexandra W
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Excellent poem. I really like the letter to younger self genre. It always makes for interesting reading, and this didn't disappoint.

Some poignant lines throughout .I esp loved this part

Pain is more than scraped-up knees,
And War is not a game.

Holding hands turns into sex,
You lie awake in bed,
The monsters in your closet
Move to fill your head.

This portrays the loss of innocence and almost suffocating oppressing tentacles of time. If only pain can vanish as simple as slapping a bandaid and eating an ice cream, but those days are gone, and we must now face the abyss, often alone, confused and wounded.

The rhymes and flow are natural, and add to the slight nostalgic mode, which contrasts well with the harsh subject.

Had to re-read the title. Not sure if the child is fading, or the adult.

Or maybe both.

And if it's description, or an imperative.

Either way, it's a great title for the piece.

Awesome stuff. Rare 100/100 from me.

Posted 6 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

Alexandra W

6 Years Ago

Thank you for the review! It's great to know how my poem affects the reader!



Reviews

Excellent poem. I really like the letter to younger self genre. It always makes for interesting reading, and this didn't disappoint.

Some poignant lines throughout .I esp loved this part

Pain is more than scraped-up knees,
And War is not a game.

Holding hands turns into sex,
You lie awake in bed,
The monsters in your closet
Move to fill your head.

This portrays the loss of innocence and almost suffocating oppressing tentacles of time. If only pain can vanish as simple as slapping a bandaid and eating an ice cream, but those days are gone, and we must now face the abyss, often alone, confused and wounded.

The rhymes and flow are natural, and add to the slight nostalgic mode, which contrasts well with the harsh subject.

Had to re-read the title. Not sure if the child is fading, or the adult.

Or maybe both.

And if it's description, or an imperative.

Either way, it's a great title for the piece.

Awesome stuff. Rare 100/100 from me.

Posted 6 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

Alexandra W

6 Years Ago

Thank you for the review! It's great to know how my poem affects the reader!
again my feelings below are today also, thanks for this beautiful piece of work
thanks for entry into my other competition, good luck x

Posted 6 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

Gorgeous, just wonderful. As an aspiring poet, I can say that there is definite color to this amazing piece :)
(Love the profile picture by the way)

Posted 6 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

Wow beautiful just beautiful words escape me thanks for entering my competition

Posted 6 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

Wow, I really love this poem.. It's pure genius.. I love the descriptive words and the clear message that you are sending with this amazing piece... I had to share it on my facebook and twitter, other people need to read this wonderful poem..

Posted 6 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

Wow, what can I say? Magically enchanting, engrossing. As well as grimly dark with sparks of light or flickers of embers of remembering. Very well executed, performed and joy to read.

Posted 6 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

Alexandra W

6 Years Ago

thank you very much, I'm glad you liked it!

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Alexandra W
Alexandra W

Colorado Springs, CO



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