Division

a line divides us

on one side stands

       stacked all steadily

the things to which

    I hold close to heart

morals

ideals

promises

                     to myself

                   to others

 

and I can see you
watching me across the way

a mess around your feet

and fire

           climbing to the sky

heat embracing you

                        just as you like it

 

chaos                           calm

              to         my

 

sometimes

opposites don’t attract
sometimes they explode

 

I won’t ask you to freeze in my arms

and you know I’ll never melt in yours

 

a line divides us

                        so little

                                    so long

Author's Note

thoughts on structure?

Reviews

[78Jon]

Neat poem. I'm new to reading poems that don't rhyme. Your poems are still easy to follow even though they don't have a rhyme scheme.

[Aly Caine]

It's funny because I used to only write poems that rhyme, and now it's difficult for me to rhyme things and still make it sound good. But thank you!

[78Jon]

You're welcome.

[78Jon]

Definitely needs a rhyme scheme. Poems without rhyme schemes are like broken sentences. Broken sentences are hard to understand and follow, though the person speaking them clearly knows what they're saying.

[Coyote Poetry]

Very nice use of words. I like how you made different almost the same. I like the thoughts leading to the very good ending. Thank you for sharing the excellent poetry.
Coyote

[Carbon Muse]

Opposites, like oil and water... never mixing, yet clinging to each other like there's no tomorrow. I have had my fair share of "explosive" relationships. Like minds can easily stagnate and become overly comfortable ... on the flipside of the coin, two personalities, in stark contrast with each other is always on the brink of boiling over, of combusting.

The structure fits the tone. The easy going calm, broken up by the restless mayhem.

"to my sometimes opposites don’t attract" ... I love how this line melts into the next, gives an air of confidence, of "I don't need to say what you know I mean"

You have a vibrant mind, I'm loving every piece of yours.

[Aly Caine]

Thank you so much! Oil and water, what a great comparison! I didn't even realize that was what I was going for until you said, but yes, you've captured everything I was hoping people would take away from this poem. And I'm so happy that the structure worked for you. Thank you so much!

[Strawberry Evil]

I like the structure! Gives it an unique, individual touch. The poem itself is very good too, it has a good mood and the words you choose fit it well, good job!