A Nerdy Love story

 Chap 1

My Story

My names Yoona Shinlee I live in Japan Im a nerd, as you know, a smarty pants, know it all, and et cetera et cetera. At my old school, I was called all of those, I was transferred into a new high school. Called Sakura Wattanabe  High. I hope I wont be bullied like at my old school, right now, I would be in collage, but I decided not to skip grades, you may think that’s dumb, but to me, I have a good reason why, you’ll know soon! 

“Yoona chan! Wake up! Mom told me she already set your breakfast!”, said sister Leia

“Ok! Im coming!”, said I

I opened the door and ran to the kitchen, I got my breakfast and ran out of the house to get to school on time.

“Wait! Yoona! Arent you gonna get your bento?”, said mom

“Come get it for me mom!”, said I

I finished my food when I said goodbye to my family, I took out a map that was Sakura Wattanabe High. It is a school for smart and rich kids, but I was in the smart section, not in the rich section, I hope hope hope! That I wont be bullied, I saw the principal, Looking at me and yelling my name out, I ran up to her, she told me her name, it was Mrs. Wattanabe, I learned she must own part of this school! Amazing!

“Its such a pleasure to have you into my school ms. Shinlee.”, said Mrs. Wattanabe

“Well its such a pleasure meeting you and coming to this school!”, said I

We shaked hands, she took me a tour around the school. But I didn’t know which one was my classes. I looked at my schedule of my classes and I looked what time I have lunch. I was surprised. I have 9 periods… so could it be that I have 20 min in each class? Gah… too much calculating. I must save it for math. When I heard the bell ran, I ran to my class. I looked on my agenda to see the map, I looked at my schedule too. 

“Uh. How am I gonna find these classes?!”, said I

I decided to just run and see if I got the right class. When I ran someone made me tripped. Everything in my backpack fell out. I had to pick it up, Suddenly a guy helped me, I didn’t like people helping me, Im independent. I decided to just carry everything in my hand to class and leave it there, but the guy said

“Hey!”

“Huh..?”, said I

“You forgot about all of these? Here.”

He gave the stuff he had in his hands to me.  I ran without saying thanks, than… that guy said

“Hey! A thanks would be nice! Oh yeah! My name is Min Ho Yoon! Just remember that! Hope to see you next time unknown girl!”, said Min Ho

I ignored him and ran into my 1st period…. I finally got in to my 1st period in the right time. For a second I thought I would have been late. My 1st period teacher name is Mrs. Suzuko

“Oh yeah! Everyone! This is our new transfer student, Yoona Shinlee.” said Mrs. Suzuko

Everyone stared at me and started giggling, laughing, talking, and whispering to each other. Whats a big deal?! Its just a new student.

“Now Ms. Shinlee, please welcome yourself to the class”, said Mes. Suzuko as she smiles softly

“W-welcome. My name is Yoona Shinlee. I used to go a high school called Sensho Roll High”, said I

Everyone stared at me, the teacher told me where was my seat. It was next to the window. I like sitting next to the window. It feels like I get to see everything. The bell ranged, when it ranged. There was an announcement. About events and  et cetera. I don’t like announcements. Its annoying. It always bugs me whenever I try to work on my school work. After a long 1st period, the bell ranged. My but started to hurt. I looked at my schedule and it seemed like each periods takes 1 hour and 20 minutes each so I would get out of class at  3:20. Hmm… seems like a good time to get out of class. You may think that’s weird, but I don’t really care. I went to my 2nd period, I calculated the time we have lunch. So the time we have lunch is 11:30 or  did I calculated that wrong. Sorry for my nerdy words. I like the uniforms here than at my old school. The uniform is clean and cute. I saw that guy again. What was his name again? Oh yeah Mi ho Yoon. Hmm… Well who cares. I hope we wont see each other a lot, love is weak, hopeless, worthless, painful, and nonsense.. I hope I wont fall in love in him… I hope.

“Oh! Nerdy girl! Hi! Remember me? I helped you!”, said Mi Ho Yoon

I stared at him weirdly.

“Uh.. Is tech your 2nd period!?”, said I

“Uh.. Yes. Why? Is that a problem, I could switch into different classes.”, said Mi Ho Yoon as he smiled

“N-no! W-wh- are you crazy.. don’t change your classes because of me!”, said I

He started to giggle. Suddenly a girl came with her name on her uniform, named Kairi

“Oh Mi Ho san! My darling!”, said Kairi

“Oh hey honey!”, said Mi ho Yoon 

I saw his sweet smile. I couldn’t stop looking at his smile. It looked warm and sweet. Gah! Don’t think about that! Anyways. When the teacher invited us into his class, everyone went in and took there seat, I saw a seat that had my name on it, I guess it was for me. I sat on that seat. I hope it wasn’t reserved for anyone except me. 

“Everyone! We have a new student named Yoona, Yoona will you come up here please?”, said Mr.Moon

I got out of my seat and came next to the teacher.

“Hello, My name is Yoona Shinlee. It is a pleasure meeting you. I hope we could be great friends.”, said I

I smiled softly, everyone was staring at me, blushing, giggling, and talking. I didn’t care what people think of me, I only care about my grades. that’s all. I went back to my seat. The bell ranged, that guy named Mi Ho sat right next to me. He tapped my right shoulder and 

Said,”Pretty name Yoona chan.” He smiled softly at me

I started to blush and ignored him without a thanks.The next 20 minutes. I saw him in a different personality.  A kind of careless face, I stared at him. What was going in his mind? Was it something with my personality? Or something that was personal?

“What your staring at.”, said Mi Ho

“N-nothing…”, said I

I looked away blushing. I pouted for some reason. My life is nonsense…. He fell asleep the next minutes I looked at him. 

“Eh!? My… you can sure make yourself go sleep that fast.”, said I

I looked away again. The next thing, I looked at him again and girls was around him and taking pictures of him… I feel like this class is full of obsessive peoples and full of cool peoples. Well… Whatever not my problem. I looked at the teacher and he was asleep. I know where the students got this from… I decided to read a book related to math and science. It was a helpful use. I guess, I looked around the class and some of the students ran out of the class to skip class. I only saw that guy who helped me, Mi Ho Yoon. I walked to him and saw his face, I looked at his hair…. I felt like touching his face. I put my hand on his face, when I did, he woke up and held my arm!

Author's Note

Everyone whos reading this, please tell me my errors and i will fix it right away ^^

Reviews

[June Summers]

It's a cute little story, but I'd really recommend taking another look at your commas and periods, especially in dialogue.

For example: “Ok! Im coming!”, said I

You don't need the comma because you already have an exclamation mark. If you don't have an exclamation or question mark, the comma should be inside the quote (not outside). Also, don't forget to add a period at the end!

You may also consider switching "said I" around to "I said," because "said I" sounds very old-fashioned whereas you have a modern setting.

You don't always have to follow a quote with "said." Sometimes another verb is more fitting, or you can leave it away entirely and add more action or description.

For example:
“What your staring at.”, said Mi Ho
“N-nothing…”, said I
I looked away blushing.

Consider writing it like:
“What are you staring at?” asked Mi Ho.
“N-nothing.” I quickly averted my eyes, blushing.

Other example:
"I looked away again. The next thing, I looked at him again and girls was around him and taking pictures of him…"

You repeat "looked" and "again" in two consecutive sentences. You could try adding more variety, like:
"My gaze drifted away. When I turned to look at him again, I saw girls standing around him, taking pictures of him."

Well, that's not perfect either, but I hope you see what I mean. ;)

[Yuhai_Yuki]

my friend told me to do that, i knew she was wrong! thanks for telling me

[Ontokki]

Oh mai gosh I didn't tell you to do that. ._."" I told you to do just what June Summers told you! Jeez...

[Ontokki]

And uh, when you are going to leave a comment on the review, there is a Comment on Review button... ._.""

[Yuhai_Yuki]

sorry xDlol

[Ontokki]

Lol Its ok

[Yuhai_Yuki]

Thanks

[Ontokki]

Omg so cute