Character

In the beginning, he pleaded for his life.

 

Now, he begs for his death.

 

Abraham said, "If you want to test a man's character, give him power.”

 

I say, if you want to test a man's character, give him pain.

Author's Note

this is been bouncing around in my head for about a week now. i tried to let it fester until i came up with more to write, but it was giving me a headache.

to be continued...maybe?

Reviews

[Morgan]

This has definitely been bouncing around in your head for a reason! Very creepy and as others have said, very chilling. You should really keep going with this, see where it takes you. Can't wait to read the character that you create who thinks along these lines, very scary. You definitely have something here, go with it!

[EMF]

I think this may be the best thing you have ever written. Short, to the point and chilling. Maybe there doesn't need to be anymore. Sometimes brevity works. There's not a word out of place here. As prose it's a work in itself. Just let the reader put together the rest in their minds. Shame you can't give 200/100.

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I say, give a man power and he will create his pain. I like this a lot; especially the two opening lines, and I think it was good to post it even if you feel it's incomplete.

[Kyla H]

Hmm, short but has much opportunity. I say go for it.

[Babieegirl]

That is so true. I love this. It's so.. CRAZY. Hahaha.. Yes, continue it! LOOOL.

[silentpoet]

damn... chilling. straight to the point and leave a person to have to wonder much..continue DEFINATELY! already I'm anticipating just by how you began. If that were on a cover I'd pick up the book instantly..I say finish would love to read it..honestly..

[Paul B. Spence]

Disturbing.

You've got a good hook to hang a story off of. I'd definately add to this. Think of why the man was in pain. Who was causing it. Etc.

Pain is a tool like any other.

[Miss Fox]

Well, sir. I think you've made a strong point in very few words, which is a skill I, and many others, have failed to master. Well done.

[Coyote Poetry]

I like these words. Words to create thoughts and conversation. Time make a man change his view and his desire. Thank you for a excellent poem.
Coyote

[Neva Flores Smith - Cha..]

I would have to say I agree with Abraham and you. Power held over someone's life can be looked at in many ways, not just death. Pain, whether physical or emotional and how one handles it is another test of character.............well written