Character

In the beginning, he pleaded for his life.

 

Now, he begs for his death.

 

Abraham said, "If you want to test a man's character, give him power.”

 

I say, if you want to test a man's character, give him pain.

Author's Note

this is been bouncing around in my head for about a week now. i tried to let it fester until i came up with more to write, but it was giving me a headache.

to be continued...maybe?

Reviews

[Morgan]

This has definitely been bouncing around in your head for a reason! Very creepy and as others have said, very chilling. You should really keep going with this, see where it takes you. Can't wait to read the character that you create who thinks along these lines, very scary. You definitely have something here, go with it!

[realmwriter]

And I would believe that to be a much more keen test of a mans character! Give him power, he will abuse it! Give him pain, he will use it, to gain the power to destroy the pain!

[Rachael]

ooooooh. I love it. Let it grow!

[Sweet Emotions]

Sounds like a good beginning. If I were you, I'd start a new paragraph with someone in pain. Ex: "Jim was being tested, all right. The pain felt nothing like any pain he'd felt before...." and then continue on with what happened to cause that pain. Some kind of freak accident? Problem with a power tool? Car crash? Sports injury? I think this is a great start, now please write the rest of the story!!

[Time.]

Continue, I liked this.

[Verslayer]

Hmm...I like the concept really TJ but? What about if you really want to test a man's character? Give him a choice!
Rob~

[joshua deathdealer]

continue!!

[guiltyascharged]

I see, I see. But in my eyes: Woman take ten times more pain than guys. Periods, CHILD BIRTH (that's a big one) and emotion heart break. Damn men, it least try to catch up with us. You say your balls are your manhood, try having that hurt like Hades every month. Try squeezing a child through "your manhood". Good poem, though. I liked it. And no, I'm not a feminist.

[Kiari Sabon]

to test a man give him pain............ what would a mans character be if you gave them pain but they didnt give up............i like the work

[Elaenor Aisling]

Very gripping. One of those short ideas that can grab the reader for moment, hold them suspended, and then drop them into the phase of reflection. A wonderful piece.

[unknown]

Yes definitely continue....my interest has been grabbed. Nothing like an intriguing description to leave a person wondering.