Beautiful Sunset

Bittersweet farewells. Find the joy in every goodbye.

Beautiful Sunset

 

 

 

A beautiful sunset

What a beautiful sunset

 

Ignore all your sorrows

hold back your tears

your soul may despair

but it's a beautiful sunset

 

do not fear the ends

the pain of farewell

try to take in

this beautiful sunset

 

our life is like earth

going through its seasons

moving on its own terms

to its beautiful sunset

 

although it may seem so

it never happens too soon

things always will end

at their beautiful sunset

 

what a glorious day

so hard to let go

but just try to enjoy

this beautiful sunset

 

sunrise

Author's Note

So this is my second shot at poetry and I think it is, somehow, worse than my first. Regression!
Anyways here it is! have at it! advice is welcome :)

Reviews

[Kevin Horsley]

I did prefer your first poem, but this is not bad.
Repetition of a phrase adds strength to a poem and this is no exception.
Some small spelling errors - last stanza - glorious for example.

Again, flows fairly well. With a little more time the kinks can be ironed out.

[Sukriti Suki]

It kind of seemed dark to me, with sunset also symbolising death....maybe that's not what you intended. I found the ' sunrise' a bit off, maybe because of the colour. But I think this is a good piece if this is your second shot.

[myst-ry]

lyrical quality keeps the write bound.. and the 'sunrise' adds the special end , infact the beginning.. nice write

[M Garcia]

Nice work. You can just see the sunset in your mind.

[CharlesMonroe]

I really like this (: it's a beautiful outtake on goodbyes, wich are just plain depressing. You gave me another way to look at it though, things happen for a reason, goodbyes will always hurt, but it'll be easier if you just look at the beautiful sunset that signifies(sp?) the end. I thank you for that (:

[Vanessa Rico]

I do like this but I agree with Kevin, I liked your first better. But that is not to say that this isnt beautiful in its own right...because it is. Such a beautiful description of a sunset...great job

[Pikey.B*****d]

very good. keep up the writing

[Thomas Fitzgerald]

Tragically and beautiful all at the same time, well done, great read

[KATHY SUE SILLS]

I can't give much advice, because i'm farely new at writing poems! But I felt something as I read this piece, it was pure beauty to me!

[KAREN]

I'm new at writing poetry too, but this poem is beautiful. A sunset can make you feel like things will be alright even if it's just for awhile. Great job!