Beautiful Sunset

Bittersweet farewells. Find the joy in every goodbye.

Beautiful Sunset

 

 

 

A beautiful sunset

What a beautiful sunset

 

Ignore all your sorrows

hold back your tears

your soul may despair

but it's a beautiful sunset

 

do not fear the ends

the pain of farewell

try to take in

this beautiful sunset

 

our life is like earth

going through its seasons

moving on its own terms

to its beautiful sunset

 

although it may seem so

it never happens too soon

things always will end

at their beautiful sunset

 

what a glorious day

so hard to let go

but just try to enjoy

this beautiful sunset

 

sunrise

Author's Note

So this is my second shot at poetry and I think it is, somehow, worse than my first. Regression!
Anyways here it is! have at it! advice is welcome :)

Reviews

[Kevin Horsley]

I did prefer your first poem, but this is not bad.
Repetition of a phrase adds strength to a poem and this is no exception.
Some small spelling errors - last stanza - glorious for example.

Again, flows fairly well. With a little more time the kinks can be ironed out.

[☯]

A very heartfelt and warming poem. I enjoyed reading the calmness and serenity portrayed. Amazing job :)

[Duane Klinger]

I liked it! The imagery was strong. Sunsets have always been a personal favorite of mine because with them comes the promise of a new hope and a new day (thus your last line, or so i think). Take confidence in your poetry, it's good.
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[Siddartha Beth Pierce]

Wonderful thoughts...nice job - keep at it!

[Muse]

No not worse! You can't find your niche until you experiment. I can't tell you how many poems I've written and later chucked them away. You yourself will be at times your worst critic. This writing it beautiful, I see no regression here............

[Darius]

i really like this, it has very good descriptions and i like how u ended each stanza the same way. oh ya i just added u so i decided to check out ur writing.

[Matthew Smith]

I'd suggest ditching the "sunrise" bit at the end. Just me, though.

I wouldn't say regression. I liked your first more, but that doesn't mean it's lesser in anyway.

Poetry isn't something that gets better every time you do it--it fluctuates. Sometimes one hits right on, sometimes not; but then again, what constitutes "hitting right on"? I'll tell ya: the opinions of others, which can vary, obviously.

Is still a good poem. You have the poetic spark. Some just don't, some simply do.

[Mariah Jane]

Wow... This is actually exactly what I needed to read right at this moment. It is inspiring and encouraging to read. Thank you so much for writing this. The only bit of critiquing that I have to offer is that you mis-spelled glorious at the end. Otherwise, this is wonderful. Keep it up.

[GlamGirl]

I really like it! You should try to write some more poetry :)
Good job!

[Veronica Chandler]

Ahhh...Back and forth swings the pendulum and I do understand the feeling all too well, but do not discount this piece for one second! For with some tweaking here and there, omit and add as you will and soon you will soon find the piece will more aptly speak that which you wished. For me I enjoyed the sunset; I saw deep inside my minds eye where beginnings are endings and endings are beginnings. Nice second shot!

[Truman S. Booth]

Wonderful thoughts here. You did very well connecting each symbol to "life," not in a cheesy way, but in a beautiful, poetic way. I liked your first one better (because I'm a meter-and-rhyme freak), but this was very well done. No problems at all. Great job.