The Rain I Guess

The rain cuts holes in sky
Writing letters I don�t recognize
Against my windshield
They spell out dreams I�ve had
If I don�t die in my sleep every night
I can remember dreaming of you
You�re kneeling down by my head
And I�m hurt, passed out once again
And you�re saying that I can�t make out
The rain, the rain pours drowning you out

The rain burst against the sidewalk
Exploding like bombs on the street
We will pass away in such a state
You can regret things that have happened
Just as much as those things that haven�t
And you�ve already made your change
So what is it you�re trying to sing
A song of laments or is it just your need
To want someone to being missing sadness
Well the rain it screams just what you think

The rain pulses by your window
I would call this day beautiful
But I�m not the one who makes names
I would kill for a clean slate or an escape
You�re wishing you would make a mistake
And I�m starting to feel things again
If I didn�t care then well can I still call it a sin
If I want to confess it and start over again
It pours away like a little stream or love leaving
But I never knew the secret to making love stay
They say the rain will wash everything away

The rain is still falling away
I think through the clouds
I caught of glimpse of something
It might have been heavenly rays
Or it might have been another pretense
Of pretending that we�re something again
And I�m not sure which I want more
But if I�m breathing then my lungs are ok
If only I could say the same for my feelings and brain
Then maybe we could be talking again
And maybe all you would say is I hate the way
And I silently agree but at least it would be something
But the rain patters softly away

And the rain�s making puddles and streams
They weave a tapestry in the street
As beautiful as anything else that I�ve seen
And that�s including your eyes sweetie
Their pattern reminds me of a chart that I�ve seen
Of people�s feelings through sex and cheating
And oh the torn tangled webs that we weave
When our only purpose in speech is too deceive
How could I ever have believed?
The rain will wreck the ships at sea

Reviews

[Raef C. Boylan]

"The rain cuts holes in sky Writing letters I don't recognize Against my windshield They spell out dreams I've had If I don't die in my sleep every night I can remember dreaming of you You're kneeling down by my head And I'm hurt, passed out once again And you're saying that I can't make out The rain, the rain pours drowning you out The rain burst against the sidewalk Exploding like bombs on the street We will pass away in such a state" - what an amazing passage to draw us in with.

This is prose poetry, in the way that flips between being a rhyming story and a poem that tells a tale; more than that, in the way that the writing is interesting like poetry and rhymes like poetry but the layout and the voice make it a story.
Again, I like your style.
Some good imagery in this piece, and also skilful demonstration of your ability to be vague about a character's recalled events and still win our empathy and intrigue.

This is emotive and clever.

Well done.
Thanks for posting it.

[Carrie Montgomery]

"You can regret things that have happened Just as much as those things that haven't " I love this line and relate very well to it.

[SweetPeachesAlways]

But if I'm breathing, my lungs are ok...boy, that sums up a lot in a mouthful!

In the rain...a good soulful and poignant place to be...Good write, doll!

[rinnyroo1994]

truthfully and honestly I cried
it was filled with so much emotion... I din't know what to think
"the rain pulses" "like bombshells" "they weave a tapestry" "that's icluding your eyes, sweetie"
I'm sure you know these lines well, but did you know they are what made me cry
what's so beautiful about it is that I don't understand it
I love that in poetry...
"the rain will wreck the ships at sea..." fave line...
brilliant, beautiful
AMAZING write...

[Bhavya Kaushik]

This is really a nice prose.Literally very much powerful , vivid, and unique.
a good read overall.
and I loved the ending part a lot specially!!

keep writing