Loneliness

No one wants to feel like this. Whats the point anyway?

Loneliness

There was a man, who owned a cat,

It liked the letterbox, so there it sat.

It was quite brave, but very small,

It wasn't fussed not worried at all.  

It'd watch the grass grow, day and night.

It'd go through rain, not a movement in sight.

Who knows what it was waiting for, was it the sun?

There were plenty of storms, but sun, there was none.

It would be dark all the time. no blue anywhere,

All it would do is sit still and stare.

The man in this story would call for his cat, he'd say, "come inside and sit on your mat".

"Why", the man thought, "is my cat out there, and why ahd he just given me that almighty glare?"

The cat would sit for years without eating, he'd stare into the distance, without changing his seating.

Until one day when the man walked out of his home, and went to sit next to the garden gnome.

He looked at his cat and knew what to do, he patted his fur and whispered, "I love you"

The cat walked in to the house with the man following, his heart was warm again, his face was glowing.

Author's Note

I have just changed the second half, giving it a bit more of a... story line? Thoughts?

Reviews

[The Watcher]

Wow, that's really deep. This poem is well written and teaches an important moral. Kudos to you!

[Brady Bynum]

Very well written. Compelling ending in that it inspires empathy for the man. Well done!

[Enigma]

As frank and simple as it can be, your poem has captured the feeling of lonliness from an outsider's point of view, so it is but obvious and writings it or reading it, in my case, will make you feel sad and create sympathy for that man with the cat. I enjoyed reading it, nevertheless. Its a beautiful poem. :)

[georgie.porgie.13]

nice

[Stormy Weather]

I like how you captured an essence of loneliness in a simple, yet powerful poem. Great job.

[TheMizFit]

It feels sad, honestly, but the poem is very nice. I liked the rhyming scheme, too. Keep it up :)

[Maya Storm]

A man and his cat. That image alone is sad.
Like the rhyming scheme, beginning to end.
Nice write

[Calypso]

Reminds me of a creative writing teacher i had in high school...

[Keevan]

I loved the last two lines. Thanks so much for sharing.