The House of Cards

The hands were dealt with

 

 

The king has his queen

A realm of princes and princess

As the jacks hold ground

To command a kingdom

From ten to one

in all four corners

The count

Always remains the same

Yet one fine sad day

The joker ceased to laugh

Instead he cried

How can we build a house?

If we won’t follow suit

To our demise

 we'll tumble.

 

By Mauricio Montoya

Author's Note

I came up with this piece while playing cards with a friend, its been awhile since I’ve written anything so drop me a few lines, let me know what you think.
Thank you, your friend and hope I still am.... Mauricio

Reviews

[emmajoy]

A cleverness of words using the royals and commoners of the pack, and the villain joker proclaims a game to the death - perhaps!? Not at all sure I've interpreted your meaning correctly but, do think your use of the words is individual and the font etc. reminds this friend how well you write!

[John Jackson (El Juero)]

Brilliant and clever, Mauricio. One possible correction:
'the joker seized to laugh'. Did you mean, 'the joker ceased to laugh'?

[KATHY SUE SILLS]

I love how you got your inspiration and crafted this poem, well done!

[J. J. Nightingale]

Sorry I do not understand dear .. forgive me ..

Jazzy :)