The House of Cards

The hands were dealt with

 

 

The king has his queen

A realm of princes and princess

As the jacks hold ground

To command a kingdom

From ten to one

in all four corners

The count

Always remains the same

Yet one fine sad day

The joker ceased to laugh

Instead he cried

How can we build a house?

If we won’t follow suit

To our demise

 we'll tumble.

 

By Mauricio Montoya

Author's Note

I came up with this piece while playing cards with a friend, its been awhile since I’ve written anything so drop me a few lines, let me know what you think.
Thank you, your friend and hope I still am.... Mauricio

Reviews

[emmajoy]

A cleverness of words using the royals and commoners of the pack, and the villain joker proclaims a game to the death - perhaps!? Not at all sure I've interpreted your meaning correctly but, do think your use of the words is individual and the font etc. reminds this friend how well you write!

[JanieB]

This is fun..different :)

[StruckByLightning]

Clever use of words

[An owl on the moon]

You brilliantly play with a full deck, my friend, twisting, turning words one over the other! Perhaps we could all be happier if we simply followed suit, but what fun would that be?

[Alicia Schroeder]

Very creative outlook.. I really enjoyed it.. :)

[Liderien]

it is very clever indeed!

[Tate Morgan]

Interesting metaphor for a life lived on the edge

[MOON]

Lovely write the deck of cards , a metaphor for life and love.

[Honey54]

Hmm I love how you put this together bud! nice piece! GREAT concept.CLEVER :)

[roarke]

ya still got the magic Mauricio, keep the pen and paper handy.

[Thea]

I find this piece really brilliant...Sometimes, those writings that just suddenly come up to our minds are the best ones...I enjoyed this one...Well done!
:)))