Why

who am I

Why

 

I cannot stop a forceful move

Nor move it when it decides to stop

I avoid the depths of water,

because I’m not prepared

Nor fly,

For I have no wings

 I am, only me

Surround by these questions.

Therefore,

Let me not be-filled ,

With the illusion of control.

For I am me

In this vast universe

Of uncertainty

 

By Mauricio Montoya

Author's Note

Everybody seems to have an answer in what I should do in life and I’m surrounded by egos so this came to mind I don’t know if it will make any sense but there was a yearning to write it. so please give me your honest opinion as to what you see in this piece.
Thank you
Mauricio

Reviews

[Liza]

I have thought about this; you expressed this elegantly and with sincere and insightful emotion. Every day, we can ask why and every day the answer will change - depending on who you ask and how they see life; depending on what they were exposed to and depending how they want to shape your mind. Writing has helped me not ask others why anymore....Writing has helped me to see what is and learn each day how the what is, is becoming what was....then my answers to Why are learned. We are all given a chance at life; perhaps some of us to enjoy it; to fulfill a purpose or to just experience something and leave a trail behind for someone else...thank you for the trail.

[Lourisa]

Great expression. It's for each person to live their own life. The decisions are yours to make, including the decision to give control over your life away to someone else. Easier said than done, maybe.
Thanks for sharing this beautiful poem.

[YouoweYoupay]

AMAZINGLY PLAIN, WISE, AND PURE-HEARTED. THE EGO OF CONTROL IS CERTAINLY TAKING OVER US, AND YOU'VE EXPRESSED LIBERATION FROM THIS EGO CRYSTAL CLEAR! LOVE IT. 100.

[Chris Smith Welshpoetcs]

So many questions ask why, few find the answer. In truth we can only be who we are. Great poem.

[Sukriti Suki]

what an exceptional piece..I am deeply moved. Let me not be filled with the illusion of control...Respect!

[emmajoy]

You're written very sincerely here, your thoughts flow well and without flowery words. Writing about things, problems, complicated thoughts often helps with decision making. However, maybe you could add another couple of lines after 'stop' at the end of the second line .. it seems to pass into another train of thought too suddenly - probably coz of that yearning.
Hope none of that offends but you asked for honesty. Now to the wonderful content. What feelings you've displayed here .. and yes, egos do fly, don't they, people always knowing better. :)
Perhaps this is my ego talking/writing, but i feel that you are what you are, dear friend, you wear your skin, dream your dreams, feel this or that about life .. that's called uniqueness or individuality - whatever. Yes, you can only alter a little, try a little and then again a little more, but at heart only you know your capabilities. Some people burn themselves out trying to be what they're not, it's knowing when to slow down and just inhale good mountain or sea air!

[Jesse N. Wall]

Solid all the way. that opener had me in loop for a moment.

[Denise]

Great poem and it makes perfect sense of what you are trying to get across...The only thing I had trouble figuring out was how the title of the poem related to the poem itself...it sounds like you understand who you are even when other people may not.

[Alicia Schroeder]

Being pulled in differant directions, uncertain of what the universe holds for you, but certain of being true to yourself, which is always a good thing to do. great peice.

[Ruth]

We have to maintain our individuality - it is paramount! I love this, we are where we are supposed to be in this universe! We can only keep an open mind and heart xx

[Neva Flores Smith - Cha..]

For I am me In this vast universe Of uncertainty...........love this Mauricio