On Those Terms

a love I could not have

On Those Terms

 

 

 

Why such excuses

if your feelings for me are not the same.

Reject me please, let me leave so blue.

At least I know this love will never bloom.

We can stillborn a relationship,

Without the formality’s,

of something that could never be.

After all what can I gain from a heart of stone

That will never bleed when mine is alone.

My door will remain open even if yours is closed

For there are some things we could never have,

Nor keep.

Why cherish, admire or even weep

For a beauty I could never reach. 

 

 

 

By Mauricio Montoya

 

 

 

 

 

Author's Note

This is to the girl in which I wrote the poems (You’re beautiful, Linda Amor and Wishful Love.) I thought, silly me that there was another chance because of something that had happen on new years eve and for a few days there was hope then she shot me down with why it couldn’t be so I wrote this and plan to give her this piece of my mind lol tell me what you think good or bad. Thank you.

Reviews

[emmajoy]

Oh dear .. this poem is fact not merely a web of beautiful words.

How sad .. loving another person makes life so very special. Love can be utterly, utterly wonderful but, surely it has to be shared, needs to be a two way feeling to have real value, real staying power.

Maybe, maybe, things will change for the better, who knows what the future holds..

There are some very touching phrases here .. 'After all what can I gain from a heart of stone ~ That will never bleed when mine is alone.'

[Ice QueenJen]

Such a sad, yet wonderful writing Maurice. Funny how things seem to be one way then turn out to be another as you have clearly shown. Time heals all wounds, even to the broken hearted!

[Cate Mcgowan]

"Why cherish, admire or even weep
For a beauty I could never reach." lovely world choice

[Mary]

"We can stillborn a relationship" mighty powerful words! this poem gets to the point very well, and very beautifully. Good writing.

[Coffee Vampier]

Well i will tell you right now this is really good. I myself can relate to this

"if your feelings for me are not the same.
Reject me please, let me leave so blue."

Honestly i think it is better to be rejected then to be lead on by a thread of a chance of hope. very nice write :)

[adriana E]

when did you write this poem? it is very touching.

[writing mojo]

Man, this is a great flow. I love the honesty in your write, gifted by the keen heart beat in each pulse now aligned...good stuff

[Crowley]

Damn, you captured that feeling of big love spurned and the sadness of not being able to have what it is we really want. wishful and futile all at the same time....great writing, sad subject matter. Well done.

[Saki!]

Wow. Stillborn the relationship without any formalities. Intense, but I've come to expect nothing less from you.

[jon cass]

"we can stillborn a relationship. without the formalities."

gorgeous & graphic.
i dig this, mano.
well done.


-jc

[Morning Star]

Its so sad yet is best to find out now so is best to be open and honest
About feelings and not just on hope,
love its so beautiful when feelings are
shared by both
I love the tone and the flow
Brilliant piece