HAPPY HOUR

Have a drink

Happy hour

 

Night scene at a night club

Clatter chatter of endless words

As I Approach the counter

The bartender gives me a glass

Slowly, but surely,

I quickly down it for another.

Hoping I can control.

The insanity of every action,

Now that I’ve had too many

 

Knowing one is never enough.

Rarely do I see doubles.

How lucky can I get,

 this for the price of one.

You know I’m on a roll

As soon as I hit the floor

I’m no longer in good standing.

as I’ve lost all hope.

Until I have another drink.

That keeps the  door,

 

revolving.

When will it all end.

If Only I could close it

And give the key to god.

 

By Mauricio Montoya

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

Author's Note

Drinking has been one of many problems in my life so I decided to confront this by writing about it.

Reviews

[Elizabeth]

"As soon as I hit the floor
I’m no longer in good standing." Oh this pun made me laugh, although the piece isn't comical in the least.

And I could write pages on alcoholism. This is a very true confession, I hope you find a way to solve your problem, liquor is such a demon liquid.

[Mauricio Montoya]

Not until now I meant to be funny but when it's killing you it's no joke.
Thank you for sharing your thoughts

[Arundass TP]

Beautiful scenes from club. Good work 👍

[Mauricio Montoya]

thank you for sharing

[Chris Shaw]

I sympathize. My brother had a drink problem which got out of hand and contributed to an early death. I think you are brave Mauricio tackling this head on. I wish you lots of luck.

Chris

[Mauricio Montoya]

sister I still drink,lol but thank you for sharing you thoughts.

[Chris Shaw]

Nothing wrong with a drink or two. It’s when you don’t know when to stop :))

[Chris Shaw]

Happy hour with cheap drinks certainly makes me happy :)

[Mauricio Montoya]

Chris I've got on a reading modest many good writes I need to get out of this block and write something that has meaning, so I need to read. thank you for making my day I will drink to that, lol

[Mauricio Montoya]

typo, reading mode

[Chris Shaw]

You are welcome my friend :)) Cheers

[Fran Marie]

a great write on the woes of drinking addiction.... with the right touch of humor with the "in good standing " part~ Well DonE!

[dukovan]

This starts from a even tempo couple lines, and then its as if you forced me tor read faster the crazier the story got, and it happened so fast. Kinda like a night getting wasted.
Always talk about your faults and problems, sometimes its even better to write it.
Good luck

[Marie Harrison]

Oh I love this poem Mauricio. I hope you find away to put this savage beast of need to sleep and keep away from the drink. Wonderful poem! My prayers are with you Mauricio!

[alesuriko]

Good poem. Fun to read. Not exactly what I was looking for with my alcohol contest but it is a good poem in its own right. Just like Elizabeth, I really enjoyed that pun with the "no longer in good standing." Very funny.

[Poetic Beauty]

this is a heartfelt write about the struggles of an addiction that many people in the world have. One in which many loose control. Great write.

[Mauricio Montoya]

Thank you for sharing your thoughts and being a great friend it's been years but I will always remember you.

[Mary]

tells the story well. I was lucky enough to be given a beautiful daughter who keeps in check that driving need to slip away.

[YouoweYoupay]

I never liked alcohol...I prefer the nutmeg that gets u high. Haha. Okay jut ignore that...*smiles sheepishly* being honest and admitting u have a problem is the first step to recovery. Good read. keep going.

[AnthonyBrumley]

well done sir. well done