CONFUSED

and lost

Confused

 

I’m an outcast in a cumbersome environment.

Flush are, the cobblestone from which I find myself alone.

Yet I scream the travesty, which ravages me as a whole.

Silence has left an echo without a path and nowhere to go.

Shall the end leave a stop from within?

Or

Shall I kick rocks?

Before my feet hits the pavement

As I move forward to reach out.

I say not.

Unless I desire to fulfill my heart,

With endless doubt.

 

By Mauricio Montoya

 

 

Author's Note

just some words from a poetry group awhile back, I've sort of fine tuned it
need some input cause it may need some work I've been in the back seat for awhile.
so thanks

Reviews

[Lorraine]

I love the way you describe silence. That was one creative yet accurate description. Honestly, this poem sort of confuses me. The meaning of this seems to elude my understanding, but I have to say it sounds genuinely nice to the ears.

Keep Writing. ^___^

[KATHY SUE SILLS]

Excellent vivid words of talent!

[Tate Morgan]

So insightful this is I like it how often we walk the well worn streets and wonder what have they seen over the years?

[Dom]

Nice poem! I really enjoyed it. :)

[Art Sun]

Nice work Mauricio, most poems or works of thought are usually written and then improved by reading them over and over, I have a few suggestions , not to take away from the originality, if you feel they help great, if not the poem is like that outcry from within, the noise of a life expressing its unforgiving reality...nice work...

Silent (Silence) has left an echo without a path and nowhere to go.


Unless I desire to fore fill (fullfill) my heart (hearts) endless doubt.

[Ruth]

This is great! A really surreal, vivid poem, like it a lot! xx

[Poetic Beauty]

I like this poem. The feelings in this poem are expressed wonderfully and clearly. Strong poem.

[MissWordSmith]

loved this so much! it was so unique. the way you used you words here... wow... i am blown away.

[Elizabeth]

This is pretty trippy. I think there's a typo here though:
"Let I scream the travesty, which ravages me has a whole."
Maybe that should be "Yet I scream the travesty, which ravages me as a whole."

I love your word choice. I had to re-read it a few times to find the whole meaning of this. I love this part "silent has left... nowhere to go." Very unique piece, nothing cliche about it. :)

[Manda]

awww i loved this. such a great write!