Love Out Of Sight

I can see

                   Love out of sight

 

There was a girl I found, beautiful inside.

 

But every time she  spoke.

she'd reflects what's was ugly outside

 

I'd reach out and tell her the beauty

in her eyes and her flair.

 

But still she flips it,

with a simple wave of her hair.

 

From time to time she'll gaze, a look that most of us know.

 

For a simple question,

 to an answer,

I'll never know.

 

Why do we pick the flower pedals before they had a chance to bloom?

 

The thought of her arose that no mater how I try,

romantically were doom.

 

I go further no more,

because violets are blue.

 

On this unwritten letter

 of a lost love that could never be true.

                              

 by  Mauricio Montoya

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

Author's Note

Just something I put together at a moments notice.

Reviews

[Marie Harrison]

Ah...so sad. Maybe you shouldn't give up on her. This is a very sweet write. I could tell you put your heart into this write. Well done!

[KATHY SUE SILLS]

Great rhythm! Flows so smoothly!

[Tate Morgan]

This looks deep into a beauties soul what a waste to be beautiful yet unable to see it or feel it Reminds me of the beautiful blond cheerleader who never develops a personality because she lives off her looks what a dead future and waste of a beauty

[joe shmo]

Awww sweet poem when your longing for love and, it doesnt seem to find you it will awaken in divine timing. sometimes the more you look for it the more it seems to hide. good poem keep writing!

[Poetic Beauty]

This is a great poem about a love that never had a chance. The flow and originality of this poem are done quite well. Beautiful and sad at the same time.

[J.Black]

This is lovely Mauricio. You have a great rhyming scheme, and I love the question "Why do we pick the flower pedals before they had a chance to bloom? " ...

It really helps what you're trying to convey here, and so many times I can say I've fallen this route.

[Art Sun]

You know Mauricio that there are so many who have walked this trail of love, and unloved...and that love where you just can't seem to cross that overbearing negativity to life...

such is love my friend...

outstanding work...

[Jacqueline Lopez]

YEAH! BABY. I LOVED THE RHYMING IN THIS POEM AND THE FLOW IS PERFECT. PLUS, IT HAS A BEAUTIFUL STORY LINE. LOOOOVE IT!

[Manda]

wow this was beautiful! I really enjoyed reading this! Nicely done! There was a few grammatical errors, but Im sure you can find them by reading this again! The flow was good too! Other than that it was perfect! Well Done!