Old school

Slipping with some slide
Never with out rhythm
But regained time
Everything lost
When you lose
Yes your mind
Slip.and slide
But you and like me
Will fall, you can bet on it
House always wins
Black jack if you can count
But the house will wipe you out
Because you figured, the game
no.vadation because you see
Skipping with a slide won't go you far
The ladder, two step up.
You're brought down, 4
By what surrounds you
Is the play
But to win this game
You need to read between,
The lines to be old-school.

Reviews

[Betty Hermelee]

HI.... I'm not into playing cards, but this seem like a game that you must know what you are doing! betting and such are way beyond me, but this seem like you know a lot about this game....you have the skill to know how to win...without describing it anymore...you just do it and that is that!!! The old school version....(whatever that is!) little said but I'm sure it's complex....
Warmly, B

[Ern M. Yoshimoto]

a fascinating exploration of losing one's mind. yet this is not a clinical illness but rather insanity brought about by the environment; a world that is just a bizzare game with no chance of winning.
But to win this game
You need to read between,
The lines to be old-school.
seems like the persona is saying that to beat the house requires a certain skill that is nearly impossible to attain.
it is an interesting stream of consciousness piece where ideas form and break like a slip and slide, one cannot hold on to anything. fantastic writing throughout and ideas that dont sit well but nevertheless important to explore.

[Mauricio Montoya]

Yeah it is what is
Thank you for sharing your thoughts

[jacob erin-cilberto]

Here I think the house refers to how figurative language can trump the literal...and there is so much between the lines. I really like this....poetry is better when it leaves something to the imagination....as if it is what you don't say that counts more than what you say.
nicely done, Mauricio.
j.

[Mauricio Montoya]

Brother thank you for a well thought comment yes we write but the reader between the lines find a different meaning that's what makes poetry so beautiful or sad.
Thank you for sharing your thoughts.

[Fran Marie]

we slip . & slide throughout life's journey
along with the sunshine there comes the
rainy days as well, from our youth to old
age is a learning process ..life is a gamble
to be sure..I like the way you wrote this
well expressed piece...nice work

[Mauricio Montoya]

Wow Fran first thank you for dropping by, yeah.things are crazy but that's life, lol.

[Mauricio Montoya]

And thank you for sharing.

[John the Baptist]

"Slip, slide and away," as the old song went. Yes, the house always has the advantage. That's why you have to play it smart. That includes not gambling in the first place.

[Mauricio Montoya]

Brother life is a gamble be humble, hope and faith to endure a struggle for a greater goal that in the end you'll have everlasting treasure, God bless, Thank you for sharing.

[Arundass TP]

Your poem make me to travel to my childhood, in school, but I remember no faces now! Beautiful poem

[Mauricio Montoya]

Hey thanks you're a good writer so thank you

[Arundass TP]

Welcome friend 😊

[Patricia Wedel]

dear Mauricio... Aging is a Dance as we slide and slide to and fro..
perhaps with a Cane once in a while. We welcome the Weather and Birds with Feathers... as we move with the Wind and adjust our Sails. Your poetry is inspiring as we dream of a Buggy Ride with Six White Horses. gently, Pat

[Mauricio Montoya]

Pat thank you but my poem is general to young and old, you must be skin or have native to bring up birds and horses, six horses was a name giving to Geronimo I love your work and your.comment because you're a good writer, but my write is about young and old and what wisdom only come from age. Thank you sharing your thoughts.