MI Santo

A Saint, Father thought his language.
Sus Santo on his birthday
But his namesake, couldn't
stop the suffering
So no more praying
Its just another day
For his name was Mauricio
When I was born, the first,
Lost for words I was named,
Mauricio now I'm doom.
But grama told me he was born,
On that date, San Mauricio
On a whisper, hoping he would be great
But dad had many woman
And children to boot
San Mauricio help us
Because dad is a loop.
Not Dad he made money
Our House in darkness
And his friends in light
But he died and I'm his.
Namesake of San Mauricio

Reviews

[Betty Hermelee]

Dear Mauricio
I guess you might have some trepidation's about your namesake... since your father did not treat you well, but seemed to treat others with money,etc, leaving you a bit sorrowful; i have heard of this situation before...it is very sad ,but not unusual....except that you have to carry the namesake with you and that may be a burden.....poignantly written
Warmly, B

[Mauricio Montoya]

Thank you Betty, yeah it is what it is but I'm glad you stop by with Your thoughts. Thank you.

[Betty Hermelee]

You’re very welcome Mauricio🌷
Warmly
B

[Ern M. Yoshimoto]

this was heavy. it's such a complex problem the persona faces, carrying a legacy that he is not completely proud of. there is no easy solution here, as is expressed in these words. 'no more praying': a depression so deep faith is gone. it is a weighty work, but you express yourself extremely well and it was an engaging work.

[Mauricio Montoya]

Hey thanks for dropping deep comment in thought, for me I thought something simple about being Catholic, wow I guess it depends on how you read it.
Thank you for sharing your thoughts.

[John the Baptist]

You couldn't stop the suffering so you stopped praying? Man, nobody I know of has stopped the suffering. Pray just for the hell of it.

[Mauricio Montoya]

I do John, its.a Catholic thing my father and grandmother were named after Saints be they born on that day when covid hit many churches closed their doors except the Catholic church until they were forced to do the same. Be homeless there were no more church to pray. That's what's I meant, thank you for your thoughts and reading, hey brother I still have faith.

[An owl on the moon]

How you poignantly explore the complexities of legacy and identity through the lens of familial relationships and rich symbolism. The final lines underscore a stark dichotomy between darkness and light, leaving a haunting impression of a namesake's heavy burden. Powerful.

[Mauricio Montoya]

Thank you for sharing your thoughts

[Poetic Beauty]

Sometimes we have to let go of the connection of our identity connected to someone who isn’t in a favorable light in our minds. Simple because we are named after someone or they were our parent doesn’t mean we are destined to be like them. We make our own choices and have our own paths we journey and what they did previously doesn’t have to be our journey.

This is a very telling story and a somewhat sad one.

[Mauricio Montoya]

PB thank you for sharing your thoughts, ur love

[Poetic Beauty]

You are welcome my friend

[Thomas W Case]

Powerful work. The emotion is felt.

[Mauricio Montoya]

Thank you for sharing.

[Dave Brown]

I guess we are all stuck with the name we have been given altho' I noticed that Brad Pitt's daughter is trying to legally change her surname!!
Cuidarse.

[Mauricio Montoya]

Thanks for sharing, lol I don't I'd for so far on the latter, its what it is lol, take care.