Last Rite

Do my words melt
before it hits the ground
Like snow of forgotten lore
Deep in my thoughts
Robert siad a wagon
Would be my doom
Before I take my sleep
Yet I write when wrong
And never when right
But time has passed
And so has frost
As cold it may be
I find peace
In that I believe
But never true
Yet I still write
Finding my words
Will ever loom
Not in a cart
like so many
Yet I will in my right
From my heart
Write that,
What is deep

Reviews

[willweb]

You know, we write whether we are right or wrong because we are poets and our words and thoughts matter. At least at the time they do and to us they do. If they matter or carry meaning for another, then that is a bonus. Nicely done Mauricio

[Mauricio Montoya]

The pen is might but we live by the sword, yes let our words be stronger.
Thank you.

[Sami Khalil]

Wow! This has deep meaning Mauricio. I see you are reflecting on life and death. Some good questions you ask. It's all in perspective.
Thank you kindly for sharing with us.

[Mauricio Montoya]

Yes there are two things, live and die, right or wrong, it's our actions that decide the outcome. read moreYes there are two things, live and die, right or wrong, it's our actions that decide the outcome.
Thank you

[Sami Khalil]

I agree. You are welcome sir.

[Red Brick Keshner]

We live as if for the moment and that moment won't ever last. Whatever Robert said will be or won't and still we live. Good stuff.

[Mauricio Montoya]

Wow it's not finish, let me get back to you

[Mauricio Montoya]

Thanks for reading but it wasn't finished read again please sorry.

[Red Brick Keshner]

Oh thanks for reposting the edited version. I love the part about writing when wrong and never when right. Personally I would rather have a balanced expression but I am also caught in the tendency to write when emotionally full and that will most probably skew the view and the sharing thereof. This is good stuff! So much internal dynamic. And still we live on.

[Mauricio Montoya]

Yeah I feel what you're saying and thank you for your thoughts yes we will live on.

[Coyote Poetry]

You wandered to many places and questions Mauricio. I asked the same questions. I wonder what we do, does it matter? Thank you for sharing the amazing poetry and your thoughts.
Coyote

[Mauricio Montoya]

Wow bro it's not finish, let me get back to you.

[Mauricio Montoya]

Thanks for reading bro but it wasn't finished, please read again,tell what you think. Sorry.

[Coyote Poetry]

I liked the poetry and I liked the strong ending to the poetry Mauricio. We want to write something worthwhile.

[Mauricio Montoya]

You are a great writer