Dark

Depression seems to be a war you can’t win.

I always know it’s coming

with glowing fangs ready to sink into my fragile body.

But when it arrives, I’m always unprepared.

I’m always taken off guard.

Tonight, won’t be any different.

 

I am in the dark,

that’s what it feels like,

cold, lonely, bone chillingly dark.

I am blind, but I can see.

I am alone, by myself with endless time.

No disturbances around.

The house is quiet,

quiet enough to hear it coming.

I could feel it creeping up on me,

like a monster.

Scraping its claws against the wall,

Dragging its feet across the floor,

Inching it’s way toward me,

Again, it’s quiet.

A breath on my neck sends chills down my spine.

My pulse starts to race,

Skin prickling with fear.

I pull my sheets up over my head.

Panic strikes.

In my own world of thoughts,

my only company,

my demons start to consume me

and in a second

I become a slave to my own worst nightmare.

They’ve won,

I know this and there’s no way out.

I’m helpless.

But suddenly I’m marching on.

Some sort of evil tells me to carry on.

“We are here for you,

we’ll do anything for you,” they whisper.

Little do I know it’s my life I pay.

And just as sudden as my fear strikes,

It subsides and I’m numb.

My body relaxes and it feels like the worst is over,

Why was I so scared?

Their comforting words soothe me.

Singing me a calming lullaby.

I need to snap out of it,

This is a trick!

I was welcomed into the darkness.

It had open arms and encouraging words,

and I listened.

I believed what I was hearing,

How stupid could I be?

What a fool I am,

I’m trapped.

I’m in a prison inside my head.

I’m stuck in this life sentence.

I scream for help,

but like I’ve been punched in the throat,

nothing comes out.

With an evil smirk they echo,

“You’re ours now.”

Reviews

[Rachelle]

You are such a talented gifted writer. Much like "The soul has bandaged moments" by the magnificent Emily Dickinson I found your poem to be very powerful in giving a sinister but powerful image to depression. You gave depression a monstrous image but one that easy to relate to. It is so deeply personal, but your confessions are beautifully grotesque. I felt like I could almost relive those feelings and moments you described. Thank you very much. Keep up the brilliant work!:)

[Zap-the-awesome]

Whoa, creepy

[Tierra Starr]

Ha yeah, i'm glad I was able to get that feeling across.

[Zap-the-awesome]

Great job! Haha.

[jacob erin-cilberto]

it is relatable...

and yes, the demons will devour you if you let them, but one way to absolove yourself of them is exactly what you are doing...writing them out of your system...
they imprison you as you imprison them...set them free and you will also be.

this is confessional poetry at its finest.

jacob

[1 Deep]

Listen closely, and hear me well. I'm glad I friended you, because upon reading this poem, I know that you are an extremely gifted writer. This poem is perfect to me, it's as if it's metaphorical and literal at the same time. I've heard it said that some experience this exact type of thing after death, yet it is symbolic of the way we often feel in real life. You are amazing for writing this masterpiece of a poem. Thank you for letting me read it.

[Tierra Starr]

Thank you so much. That honestly means a lot to me :) This poem is still a work in progress, I will be editing it soon. This is definitely how many feel in real life. I wanted this poem to be relatable.

[Deuces]

At many times we get sucked into the other side. The uncontrollable, dark feeling that occurs is frightfully conveyed here. Nice piece here.

[shinybluestars03]

Fantastic poem,
loved it from beginning to end.
Sometimes being in a dark place in our lives always makes
us write the best things.
Keep on writing
Thanks for sharing.

[Tierra Starr]

Thank you so much :) I have learned to embrace the darkness. In my weakest, darkest moments, I have written my best work. There is so much inspiration and so many words to be said.

[shinybluestars03]

Yes, I totally agree I have also written my best work in my darkest moments somehow things become so much clearer when that happens.

[Tierra Starr]

Writing is my release. It's the healthiest way to lessen my hurting. Writing and music are the most amazing remedies.

[shinybluestars03]

Yes they are both the best medicine ever created!

[Tierra Starr]

You felt the ambience, while you couldn't see, wow, this write, gives me the chills.
Such an endearing beauty it has, of the so called darkness... a whimsical eerie and very good vision... I liked it, thank you

- Elisa

[Tierra Starr]

I am glad that you were able to get so much from it! :) I presented this piece to my creative writing class and my teacher informed me that I used too many cliches. I believe that the so called cliches make this poem what it is. I tried to explain what it feels like when you're in such a deep state of depression you feel like there's nothing you can do. Thank you so much for your input.

Yes, dear, this was a great piece of writing, and I'm here always to support, or help, just know that, it can be a while before you see me, (just busy in life) but I will come back.... Tell your teacher, it's real... I guess, he has himself issues... :P

[Tierra Starr]

Thank you for that :)