Purpose And Desire

Eh. Kinda just thought of it. It happened before my eyes I guess.

My mind ponders desire 
What is desire? Do I feel the fire? 
Does it burn like a candle flame?
Or weakly, maybe even tame? 

Do I live for a purpose? 
If so, what purpose do I service? 
Am I just a knick-knack on a shelf? 
Or do I have to find purpose myself? 

And when will I find it? 
When will it appear before me, the flame lit? 
Can I sit so idly by, waiting for it to come along? 
Now let me ask, to go about it that way, would it be wrong? 

For now I'll lay these questions to rest 
To rest, so far away from me, like baby birds in a nest 
I'll leave it be for so long, but nurture it all the while 
Until purpose and desire come my way, I will smile

Author's Note

Feedback appreciated and encouraged. Please.

Reviews

[Rhia Barton]

Very nicely written, the rhyming scheme works very well! I would say the 'knick-knack on a shelf' bit sounds a bit random and kind of throws me a little bit, but otherwise, a very good poem! I love the flame imagery that keeps coming back, very imaginative!

[Helena G.]

It did not make me want to stop reading it. It was very interesting and kept coming back to the imagery of flame and the wonders of the mind. Very well written and great rhyme scheme :)

[Courtney Hough]

It's hard to write a poem with every line having a rhyme without sounding like Dr. Seuss, but you just did it:) Simple and raw. Great write.

[LastMonth]

Not bad at all.
Nice rhymes, don't feel forced at all.
The stanzas are reletivly short, kept to 4 lines, which is the basic poem format that I like to use as well. Two Rhymes per stanza.

About the actual content,
A cool subject to go on. Desires and goals in life are something most people ponder about.
Personally I think that the greatest part is that we choose our own.
Best of luck, keep writing.