When You're Gone

Don’t you know when you’re gone

I wont even miss you

And that’s because daddy Im never around you

I’m your daughter you should love me

Why help bring me to this world if

You’re just going to abandon me

 

Hey daddy good morning can we hang

“Nope sorry baby im busy gotta do my thang”

But dad I havnt seen you in like a month

“Look I said no now that’s enough”

Why, why can’t you just take me with you

Come on dad please I never get to see you

“Look here little girl now I said no

And last time I checked no means no”

Fine then give me one good reason why we cant hang out

And another reason for why you always shout

“I do what I do cause I can do what I do

And last thing Im going to so Is be questioned by you

Now go away girl I gotta go make the money

Now have a good day, ok gotta bye honey

I have to go, money don’t make itself

Go over there and read get a book of the shelf”

 

Don’t you know when you’re gone

I wont even miss you

And that’s because daddy Im never around you

Im you’re daughter you should love me

Why help bring me to this world if

youre just going to abandon me

 

Here it is 8 years later now im 16

I see people everyday but you’re the only one I havnt seen

So I decide to call you

Hey dad whats up how are you?

“Im doing fine,  hows it going”

I saw you play baseball and it was amazing

“Why thank you honey now what do you want”

What are you talking about? You’re all I want

“Yeah right” why don’t you believe me?

I never ask you anything, just to come see me

“You’re a teen all you want is money”

Wow really that’s how you talk to your honey

All I want is to see my father, at least once in a while

But you cant even see that, hmm someones in denial

“Ok fine baby I will visit you more

Now calm down I promise I wont lie anymore”

Ok dad please stick to what you say

And please, Can I call you once a day?

 

Don’t you know when you’re gone

I won’t even miss you

And that’s because dad I’m never around you

I’m your daughter you should love me

Why help bring me into this world if

You’re just going to abandon me

 

 Ok now six months later

You didn’t stick to your word you’re such a liar

Why is it so hard to visit your only daughter

I don’t understand, why do I even bother

So I pop up at your place and catch you by surprise

Wow look at the shock in your eyes

“Baby what are you doing here

Wait Im in Richmond, how did you even get here”

I got a ride from one of my friends

So this is more important than me? Sitting on your rear end!!

“Ok honey I’m just tired”

You know what as my dad you’re totally fired

“Ok hold on baby im sorry I need another chance”

No way by the time you stick to your word my life would end

Go ahead hang with this s**t

Obviously if she can keep you from your child you love her a lot

I’m you’re gift you know the one that you claim fell from above

I’m done with you, for you I have no love

 

I hope you know now that when you’re gone

I will not miss you

Because you were never around

I’m your daughter you should have loved me

Thanks for helping bring me to this world

And thanks for abandoning me

Reviews

[hmm]

Wow very impressed with this emotional read.

[Raquisha]

The fathers that are like this should be ashamed of themselves, nice job

[blueeyeddevel]

This Poem is so true to its self. Their is a lot of idiots like that around.

[Dove]

Thank you for the reviews everyone

[alegria]

written really well...good...cn feel d whole thin d situation is well explained...niceeee...

[Melissa Edmunds]

I feel your words. I went through a situation like this and totally understand. This is beautiful and very enjoyable. You did a wonderful job. I could feel the pain behind the words. You put your emotions out there when you wrote this it is beautiful. Thank you for sharing.

[Sweets]

This is so sad..
I truly loved this poem!
Great rhyme!
Wonderful work!

[Dreamer]

ok...well i read this completely because the topic is something that I am very familiar with. I can tell that this is a very emotional piece and probably was written from a flow of strong emotions. Hence some of the minor errors. I dont really like to tell people how long their pieces should be because i tend to have some very long pieces myself when emotions take over because its like your taking this chance to write evrything u needed to say. However, i personally believe that if u shorten this piece, and concentrate the emotions it will be even better. Because of the lenght of this, your emotions are a bit diluted and this makes it possible for the reader to lose the beautiful feelings u display here and mistake it for a rant. But trust me, i understand this and this is a good piece. i particularly like the style. Good job:)

[Black]

it is a nice piece of write :)
nicely done