Confined

I wrote this poem a long time ago when i was going through depression and my mother sent me to my room. I looked around and saw my four blank walls and it made me feel trapped.

Im sitting in my room all alone
Confined by these four blank walls
I dont like being alone
So I sit
And pray
And wait
And hope
For someone to come rescue me
Rescue me from this blank room
I need someone to break down the walls
Someone please break down the walls
That keep me confined
Someone please break down the walls
That keep me alone
Someone rescue me from this place
Someone rescue me from this he**
Someone please, I need help

Author's Note

This isnt anywhere near the best poem I've written but its still mine. Tell me wha you think?

Reviews

[Hotwater]

I like that authors note! what we think is "best" is not what some readers think and what we think of as "not best" is rewarded with some good reviews... so there! lol
This work is strait to the point, depression is what came into my mind as soon as I finished reading... then I saw your note at the top. Nothing wrong with the poem, it's yours! Well done.
*bird*

[alegria]

yes agreed its not ur best..but can feel wats written and tats wat matters..deep emotions conveyed...good wrk..keep writin..many feel it this way..have felt it ma self..

[M.E.Lyle]

Growing up is tough. It's been many decades since I was a teenager. I still remember the anguish of growing up. I wouldn't go through that again for 10 trillion dollars. I know you've heard this a hundred times, but things do eventually get better. It's a miracle. Good luck to you. It's great how you youngsters all seem to be able to express your feelings so well.

[Aly Jones]

For some reason those first few lines reminded me of a song. (These Four Walls by Miley Cyrus)

[Your Perfect Disaster]

You did really well my friend.
You're work has yet to cease to amaze me.
You've obviously been through a lot.
Keep it up, you're doing amazing!

[Raven Starhawk]

Amazing. I know you probably read that a lot but it still is every bit true. This has a pleading nature that tells a story of a lady in peril and in need of a hero.

[TWISTED NIGHTMARE]

i really like this poem and i love how i can feel the emotion and the pain...amazing write!!!

[A.E. Reed]

I really like it. It evokes this feeling of despair and depression. Makes me feel alone and like I have no where to go, like I'm hopeless and helpless beyond repair. :) Nicely worded and I'm sure there were no spelling errors but honestly it was so good I couldn't focus on any of that. :)

[Mikey alexander]

amazing :D xxx

[Chris Taylor]

I don't read poems to judge them worthy. I read poetry to evoke an emotion and bring forth knowledge and a spiritual awakening. So, I won't be comparing this to any thing but how I makes me feel. This is just dripping wet with despair. You served that dish up and fed it to me on a cold silver platter. I totally love this piece. I almost jerked a "man tear" out of me.....almost. lol.