Trance...Ending

When I shed this skin
Will you watch in awe;
Mesmerised,
As if something,
never seen before?
Or will you tremble,
Disturbed,
By the freedom...
As you're watching
these atoms,
Reassemble.
When I tiptoe
Along delicate branches
Does it invite fear,
Making you unsure,
Of that which way to go?
Or do you like my dance
Under the starlit sky,
Where I shimmy past
Lunas watchful eye?
Trance -
Ending...
Do you feel it,
That lifting vibration?
Let your eyes go blind
As you open your mind...
Revel,
In this beautiful sensation.
Come join me;
These things I speak of,
Are all for free.

Author's Note

Any and all feed back is deeply appreciated!

Reviews

[emmajoy]

'When I tiptoe .. Along delicate branches .. Does it invite fear, .. Making you unsure, .. Of that which way to go? .. '

From imagination to reality! There's a sensuous stream of invitation in this unusually phrased poem. I truly appreciate its crisp yet silky phrasing; there's a hidden agenda within a story and plenty of emotions scattered like confetti. You have a start and a finish and importantly, a fine between!

[thumbelina]

Thankyou! That's lovely feedback!

[Roger Turgeon]

Take the time to smell the roses...opening the mind can usher in a lot of beautiful sensations....and for free ( : O )

[thumbelina]

So true! The best things are free!

[My_Obsidian_Eye]

charming and intriguing nicely done :3

[thumbelina]

Thankyou kindly!! :)

[Rebecca Leigh]

I was sucked in to this poem, I felt like the suject going through the transformation, well done.

[thumbelina]

That's brilliant feedback! Thankyou so much! :)

[Rebecca Leigh]

You're welcome :)

[Daydreamer]

This piece transported me to place of timelessness. What an exquisite poem!

[thumbelina]

Thankyou so much, that's so lovely to hear!

[RayXor]

i feel like i just experienced a ritual! great job keep them coming

[thumbelina]

That makes me happy! Thank you :)