The life of Mory J. Hunter , a story by T.H.T Lookman ( Part I ).

I wanted to make a story like this for a while now and started the project today , i would like to hear what you think of it , NOTE : THIS THE FIRST PART IT IS NOT DONE YET.

Untitled project ( for now )

Part I : The life of Mory J. Hunter by T.H.T Lookman

 

" I could do it , i could end it now " Mory thought'' this could be it ''.

 

Mory john Hunter , is a smart twenty two year old guy from colorado, he lives with his parents  near the twin lakes  in an old rotten house used by almost every family member over the last century. Mory's family was very religious and went to church once a day and on sunday two times, Mory's father, John Hunter wasn't like that he was an atheist and was mad about everything and always blamed his family for his mistakes and a lot of times he would hit his wife and mory  without a reason. Yesterday was the day that john finally was able to get out of the house, he went to a market stand and bought a knife for $9,99 the only money he had left from buying food for dinner , he knew mom was going to be mad but he knew what to do to make her happy again , well maybe not happy but she's certainly going to be thankful  and mory , well mory was going to be happy , because today dad was back and he knew it he planned it all it was time an ending , he thought this was never going to end but today it is. 6:39 PM, dad is home, dad kicked the door open and yelled: "hello honey i'm home , let's go to bed . '' , "dad is obviously drunk again" thought mory and he knew that his father was going to hit him again, "he's here , he's going to hit me  " , " hey son , how is you doing " his father said , "i'm fine dad " John walks up to mory who was sitting on the couch reading a book , he has a knife in his left hand and right when his father , john wants to hit him he stabs his him in his back , Mory says nothing and looks at his dad he's enjoying it, he likes stabing his dad and the blood coming out of his body , his father yells : " you've lost you're mind boy , you're f*****g nuts !!!!!!!! , F**k , F**k, F**k " his father is trying to hit him and mory's mother marie comes in and screams and cries, she doesn't know what to do and just stands there crying. Mory pulls his knife out of his fathers body , his father turns around and mory hits him in the face and stabs his father in the heart , his father screams : you're a psychopath , F**K!!!"  his father falls on to the ground and dies , Mory looks at his his mother she's on the ground , she can't breath and dies too. Mory is alone now , he grabs his stuff and gets out of the house as fast as he can, he feels happy on the inside , he feels free , free from all the bad things in his life it's done . "I did it , i ended it ", says mory to himself "this was it".  

"  For God so loved the world that he gave his one and only Son, that whoever believes in him shall not perish but have eternal life." John 3.16

Author's Note

There might be some grammar problems , that's because i'm thirteen and i'm from holland , let me know what you think and give it a rating . ( P.S. i suggest you listen to classical music while reading , it makes a better experience. )

Reviews

[Shunny Houston]

Being from Holland, you did very good, even on English standards. I know people that can't even write a decent paragraph, let alone a story.
I liked this story, it was both funny (the dad falling to the ground and dying as well as cursing) and sad (the mother dying too). Those are two totally different emotions yet I felt both from the same sentence. That's a very difficult thing to do. Applause applause! *Lady Gaga*

[Thomas H.]

Thanks for the great and awesome review , I hope you'll read part II.

[Emily]

You got my attention right away! Good Job!

[Thomas H.]

Thank you for your great comment.