Elements Reign

quick write...not too proud of this. Seems mediocre...I may revise it later on.

Let the rains fall;

Let the fires burn;

Let the earths crumble;

Let the breezes fade-

May they wash over me,

Purify me;

May they consume me

In whole;

May they shake the barriers

And my bones;

May they silence the world,

And make the rest grow still.

These natural beings, demigods

That steal the breath

In countless, incredible ways-

May they reign in pride,

Forever in their shared kingdom,

Petty enemies these elements
Dare not make.

May they grow and never die;

May they fill the world with wonder;

May they forever reign-

Let the rains fall.

 

Reviews

[N.S. Jones]

Beautifully written as always, Sara Marie! The imagery in this one makes me think of Enya's 'In the Rain' but at the same time it's like Hilary Duff's 'Let The Rain Fall'; especially where you wrote "May they wash over me, Purify me; May they consume me In whole; May they shake the barriers And my bones; May they silence the world, And make the rest grow still". This was the part I liked the most.

[Sarah Marie]

oo thank you so much for your kind comment! I have heard the Enya song, but not the Hilary Duff one. I will have to check it out... thanks again!

[EverleafOwl]

Ooooh.....VERY nice! Different from your usual style: me like-y! X) Nature fasinates me as well- you did a good job capturing that and it's power. Great job, it don't need no edits! (But this might...double negative lol!)

[Sarah Marie]

hehe I actually re-read the double negative before finishing your review... I know I am a grammar nerd :) I didn't know how really to do this piece since I don't think it was originally suppose to end there, but I figured a little simplicity about the elements would suffice. Thanks!

[EverleafOwl]

You are very welcome! Hehe, my sneaky grammar messups...YOU CAUGHT THEM! X)

[Megara]

lovely:)