Forgetting You

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With every step you take
My heart starts to break
I want you to come back
But now I'm too late

Now that you're gone
I feel it's been too long
For me to still be grieving you
So now I'm moving on

I found better people
Ones that I love
And tell me every day
That I'm their only one

Reviews

[Liverpoolfan]

Again, this is quite short, but it really doesn't matter at all. The emotion in this poem seems to come through the page lol. There's no other way to explain it. People can easily relate to it. Another great poem. Wonderful. Keep up the good work. However, in both this and the other poem there was no punctuation? In the other one, I don't think it was needed. But here, perhaps it is. And also, in this poem some words don't seem to quite fit. For example in the second to last line, the 'and', seems to put the reader off briefly. I'm not sure why (maybe that's just me). But I think that it should be changed, with some punctuation added, like so:
"I found better people,
Ones that I love,
Who tell me every day,
That I'm their only one."

I hope this helps. And, you know what the weird thing is, I actually really liked your ending :S
Anyway, I think i'll just shut up now lol

[MNeilsen]

This is a really great piece Mo. I can feel the saddness of the goodbye and the regret of moving on. I look forward to reading more of your work.