a Pale Goodbye

A poem about suicide

I'll soon depart
No coming back
Regrets I bring
Are all I pack
My empty life
No love contains
I slide my knife
To open veins
Like sour wine
My liquid spills
No light divine
As darkness fills
The silent air
Of lonesome room
Of long despair
And soon my tomb,
Not one shall grieve
Nor even sigh
This world I leave
A pale goodbye....

Reviews

[Rana]

The pattern is remarkable! I admire the way it flows so easily with the perfect words. It's the kind of poem that decieves the reader into thinking it must've been easy to write. Apart from being beautiful, it's unique as in the attitude of the protagonist who knows the truth before the suicide that his death shall not me mourned for long.

[thewholesoul]

Thank you very much for your read and review. very much appreciated. yes, for the protagonist, the saddest part is knowing that noone will care when s/he is gone. some people unfortunately lead very very lonely lives. they need more love. i suppose we all do. take care

[marcus]

I liked this one a lot also. Is English your second language? I 'm only asking because your from Bolivia, and all the language used in your poetry is impeccable. Just curious, because I speak Greek, but it's my second language and I am having no luck composing any poems in Greek so far.

[thewholesoul]

Cheers Marcus, although i speak spanish pretty well now, english is my first language. i was born on the emerald isle of ireland and i left it when i was around 21. no regrets however, i've been around the block and got to marry a hot latin american wife! sure beats the freckly red heads varieties back home!!! be well my friend

[marcus]

cool! thanks for the info.