Beaten by Flames of pink

A few days have pasted and I still haven’t enough money to fix the hole in both the ceiling and floor.

 

“The killings in the south of Veson have climbed to 50 deaths in all, but more of that later during the show.  Now to Larry with the weather,”

 

“Later during the day they will be a slight chance of rain, as well as…………” I stare at the T.V screen in the window of a T.V shore, the lights in the shore turn off as I blow up the T.V.

 

“This just isn’t my day,” I say walking away from the seen on the crime.

 

“That wasn’t nice,”

“Aren’t you going to pay for that?”  Two women stare at me, one has white hair and blue eyes and the other has green hair and grass green eyes. I counting walking,

 

“Where did you learn that any way,” the girl with green hair says. I stop and think for a bit,

 

“I don’t go to witch school or any school.” I say staring at them,

 

“Then come to our school!” greenie says

 

“You do have the talent, you haven’t been to a school and you can blow up a T.V.” the white hair says, I stare for a while and decide to make a run for it. This isn’t the first time I’ve meant witches I have to run from, but just as I get really to leg it I hear a laugh.  And both girls disappear,

 

“Well that wasn’t freaky at all!” I say to calm myself down, after a few minutes standing there I walk towards the dinner.

 

∞

“Leave her alone, I want to test this child before we get back. Oh and let me have so fun with those two brats from earlier as well.” The same guy with the red eyes says grabbing the boy from Small box street by the head. The little girl is there too as well as the girls Hane meet in the street.

 

“Let me see what should I do next.” He says laughing,

∞

“Thank you, have a nice day!” I say to a costumer who’s leaving, I start picking up some plates left on his table when I hear the same laugh from before coming from outside. I run out the back and look around, then I realise they tricked me; I go back inside and see the 10 new people have come inside. I feel their magic, but I can’t tell which one it is, there’s too many people to tell. I quickly get back with it and attend to the costumers, they out smarted me, so I’ll have to pay them back.    

 

After work I hear the same laugh, so I just walk home. Or so they think when I reach the park, I summon as much pink fire as possible and though it in their direction.  Before I look behind me they already have left, dam it.

 

∞

In the same park,

 

“Dam, she got me!” Say the guy with his red eyes flaming, he grabs his arm which is dripping in blood and rips off his sleeve. He wraps it around his arm and smiles, “She’ll be more fun then I through.”  

Author's Note

terrible grammar

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[Trigorin]

Not bad, but check your spelling and grammar. It's the little errors like that which are so easily fixable if you just put a little effort in that make the reader question whether or not you really care. Your story is interesting, but make sure to avoid passivity and to be conscious of whatever message you want to send.