Self.

Self.

A Poem by featherstoflight

self.

underneath the pitty

beyond the self sabotage..

in the dark of my selfishness

i lay inside my un-admitted dreams

surrounded by the honesty

I feel the truth rumble

I close my eyes in lies

knowing I  seek the light

I cover my ears so I can’t hear within

© 2013 featherstoflight


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TLK
This is an interesting glimpse behind the bars of a mind's own prison. I think it could be extended to show more of the self-flagellating mindscape. We got from pity to self-sabotage -- is there something deeper which is even worse? As well as the dreams to which you do not admit / are not admitted to (nice double meaning) what about the nightmares that you participate in too freely when your secrets are closed off to others?

Behind your face, what screaming skull lies beneath?, I ask.

There is a lot of Freudian stuff to this -- unconscious forces, an inability to admit to yourself the truth, these forces coming out in odd ways. Freudian psychology is not exactly about being 'true', as it's all about metaphor and stories, so no wonder it's a massive aspect of modern writing. If you don't know about it, here's something to get you started:
http://www.simplypsychology.org/little-hans.html

Few typos: "pitty", "sabotage..", and one uncapitalised pronoun "i".

Posted 11 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

featherstoflight

11 Years Ago

You cant understand how greatful i am.
TLK

11 Years Ago

I can begin to. I have also birthed babies that I have been proud to say live for at least a few pre.. read more



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TLK
This is an interesting glimpse behind the bars of a mind's own prison. I think it could be extended to show more of the self-flagellating mindscape. We got from pity to self-sabotage -- is there something deeper which is even worse? As well as the dreams to which you do not admit / are not admitted to (nice double meaning) what about the nightmares that you participate in too freely when your secrets are closed off to others?

Behind your face, what screaming skull lies beneath?, I ask.

There is a lot of Freudian stuff to this -- unconscious forces, an inability to admit to yourself the truth, these forces coming out in odd ways. Freudian psychology is not exactly about being 'true', as it's all about metaphor and stories, so no wonder it's a massive aspect of modern writing. If you don't know about it, here's something to get you started:
http://www.simplypsychology.org/little-hans.html

Few typos: "pitty", "sabotage..", and one uncapitalised pronoun "i".

Posted 11 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

featherstoflight

11 Years Ago

You cant understand how greatful i am.
TLK

11 Years Ago

I can begin to. I have also birthed babies that I have been proud to say live for at least a few pre.. read more

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