BE KIND REWIND

Baby I've got nothing but,

time

just hit rewind
let me tilt you back like a bottle of wine
doesn't matter if it's your place or mine
or if it's all in my mind
let's keep it together like it was a poetic rhyme
put us on paper to reminisce for later
like a sweet taste that we can saver

if you could let me out of this prison in your heart

for good behavior

I can put you on a pedestal

like you were a savior

worship you every day and night
trust me baby what I'm telling is so true
if I had a time machine I'd come right back to you

be there in your time of need

reappearing to redo all my bad deeds

I'd disappear just so you can miss me
so when you see me again you would jump on me and kiss me

it'd be like deja vu how I came back to you

tell me to never leave as you look in love at me

I will tell you

"Baby I've got nothing but,time"

if you just hit rewind...

by the unknown sith

Reviews

[barleygirl]

Being into rhyme & rhythm myself, I really enjoy the musicality of this poem. I enjoy the loose-goose way this narrator throws it down, kinda serious, but not-too-serious. This feels like he/she is pulling out all the stops, trying to convince the other person, and at the same time, it feels like this narrator isn't going to blubber if the pitch doesn't work. This is how we need to be with other people in general -- let them know fully that we want them, but not making it obligatory to respond in kind. Just being irresistible & hoping the other person can't resist. (((HUGS))) Fondly, Margie

[jacob erin-cilberto]

this has such rhythm...I especially like the first half of this...
a light hearted rhyme and near rhyme which mask the deep hurt felt...but not enough to conceal it.

I put many relationships on paper...and it is like putting those thoughts in a safety deposit box.
We hold that key...and can open it whenever the need arises to remember.
j.

[ice_cubes]

sheesh!!! the rhymes!!! absolutely love it

[Betty Hermelee]

A prisoner of love; you've got all the time; just waiting; again; just hit rewind and remember how sweet was our love; now I just want you to rewind and repeat all that was before you disappeared; let's try to keep it together...I would to anything to come back to you. I really like the way you composed this, adding poetry to entice. It flows and rhymes well. Thanks for sharing. Betty

[veewrites]

I don't know if you meant for it to read like a rap song of sorts, but it really does. It's enjoyable and has a nice flow to it. Great job!