Extinct Time

An inquisitive mind-- flourished from oppression into a cave as rich as Reed mine
Where tourists can flood my thoughts
Pick at my gold and sell it for their lives
Stabilizing their own
While weakening my historic rise
Greed increases, and relationships are seceded
Because everyone wants to obtain sacred pieces

 
Wandering through pixels of distorted visions
Gatherers become hunters
Painting with blood, their own ambitions
Setting standards for the continuing generations
In turn, a figurative genocide
For the sake of remaining proclamations
Paralyzing, terrorizing, and destroying indifferent others

 
If time manipulates unfortunate events, perhaps the solution
Is just the opposite
Creatures of habit soon face an evolution
Once protagonists reach a state of lucid retribution
It defines them as antagonists playing a role of uncanny acts
The renowned vigilantes use time as their sword
To reenact their own demise and call unto their lord


Scattered within the affluent cave
The people and their children
And their children's children
Are enslaved, digging their own graves while being influenced by vacuous hopes and darkened shapes
The repetitive motions devolved into psychopathic notions
They attempted to escape but were punished for breaking the rotation
Whipped, humiliated, and shamed
The cave insulated the pain
By offering priceless artifacts
Within my knowledgeable den






 

Reviews

[andrew mitchell]

A wonderful write, how we play with humanity and mother nature alike not knowing how delicate the balance of life is. I read Chernobyl won't be safe for humans for another 220,000 years. we can't afford too many of these mistakes! Lovely imagery, meter, just well written.:)

[Drcicarlo]

I appreciate your review Andrew! The relation to Chernobyl was powerful considering it was a man-made disaster. Human errors are often seen as something minut, because usually we believe it can be rectified. Villagers in the town still reside for their mind tricks them into believing it is safe. That is a perfect connection. Thank you for taking the time to read!

[Ken Simm.]

I am reminded of Jung's story of falling into a cave beneath his feet. And finding he is falling into the history of the collective unconcious. I don't know if this has a relevance but this interesting write gives me the same feeling. How habit forces evolution perhaps and then is found lacking.
This is a write I will return to. For the nonce I find it multi layered and rich.

[Drcicarlo]

That is a fascinating relation! I enjoyed reading your interpretation of the piece. The collective unconscious is precisely what connects everyone to each other. Evolving hasn't occurred in several eras because we have finally synchronized into similar roles in our international society. Excluding conscious thinking and only using the unconscious we are all creatures of habit. Animals are instinctive and will do everything the same until the environment changes. Perhaps for a lighter response, if one continues the same action with hopes of a different reaction they are insane, but even Einstein was a bit insane. Thank you for your profound review Ken!

[Ken Simm.]

I would suggest that perhaps mankind hasn't evloved but devolved away from Jung's archetypes. Thats why we feel magick does not work anymore. Don't get me wrong I am not a follower of the Occult per se but it was a series of perceptions that challanged mankind's mind.
We are creature of habit but perhaps as many have posited mankind has more than one level to his attics.

[Einstein Noodle]

a full meal ... lots of fine metaphors and personifications .. invading such personal spaces as the mind is like a last stand ... kind of reminds me of the Inferno of Dante ... without the light of goodness the world will fall ..the can be no doubt ..we spiral and are repelled into the darkness of hate and viciousness ...frightening says i! you have struck a note ...if we would only listen eh!?
E.

[Drcicarlo]

Thank you for reading the piece and creating such a fine review! Dante's Inferno is a great way to aid in interpretation. Interestingly enough I once believed the darkness helped stabilize humanity. With darkness engulfing the people they will appreciate the lingering light a lot more. As you grow to understand behavior, intentions, and demeanor of those around you, then the light will surly diminish. We follow each step accordingly in the same direction.

[Einstein Noodle]

perhaps ... we can sure enough be more filled with darkness than not ..every choice we make counts i guess ...some far more important than others ..like speaking up for what is wholesome when it is not "popular" ... stepping forward to do the right thing tho fearful ... i think the light shines more often than we know ..it just doesn't grab the headlines as readily as sordid and horrifying does ;(

[emmajoy]

We see and are what past and DNA form us; touched by the uninvited, ever to be guests. Predetermined self, minds and hearts, brains and blood create their own needs but as our genes decree. Perhaps.

Read this twice, read as at first thought, a travelling through a cave, a place, a life and feeling, seeing the all around. But then second time, right or wrong, felt something different.

Ok, might need come back and back.. each time writing my own pre.determined thoughts til - if ever, I escape them!!

[Drcicarlo]

Emma your reviews are always very well-put and thought out thoroughly. I appreciate your understanding and I am glad I was able to allow for different interpretations. A few things I have noted within your comment-- predetermined or predisposed lives were integrated heavily within the cast system, which is not used as much to this day. People were thought as beings that reincarnate solely based off of their previous lives. The idea of reincarnation is interestingly ironic because the meaning itself is a reincarnation. Most belief systems suggest that whatever life you are born to lead, or have led will bring you to a Heaven/Paradise, or a Hell/Purgatory. There is another connection you made when you mentioned "cave" and "right or wrong", have you ever read Plato's "The Allegory of the Cave"? Philosophy is fascinating, and if you are interested I only suggest you take a glimpse at that. Thank you for your time and kind words.

[jacob erin-cilberto]

i think the distorted vision is that accumulated wealth can protect us...and make us happy...but affluence doesn't protect us from disease, from extinction...and it does not insulate the heart.
and the world needs heart to survive....not more gold.
i really like the effect of this write.

j.

[Drcicarlo]

Your insight reveals a lot about the way you perceive modern happiness. I agree and respect your opinion immensely. Thank you for your kind review Jacob.

[emmajoy]

Money can't buy intelligence, love, fortitude, empathy et al. Surely money is nothing more than something that can be lost overnight and with it goes the comforts one thought would always be.. Maybe the 'cave' then becomes a place in which to hide.

I rather thought that each step through Time takes one nearer to Perfection, that nothing less than Truth is the ultimate destination?

Surely the 'caste system' is/was an umbrella phrase for bigotry, arrogance and fear?

I've read quite a few books, Erica! Exchange is a priority when sharing other's words.