Approved

I got my heart in the East and my mind in the West

some kicks on my feet and a drum in my chest

I rise with the sun and her orient roots, giving into sweet slumber when her luster dilutes. 

And while you're there, feigning supremacy

Making a scene whilst proclaiming your legacy,

Lost in translation and swimming in elegy, 

infused with jargon and rhetorical pedantry~

We look at the world experimentally. 

So turn up the noise and dim all the voices

tune into yourself, make your own choices

Rise with the moon and turn off the sun

Because I swear to you, this heritage shines on. 

Reviews

[Josh121]

Beautifully constructed.
Well written
and
all around awesome
Great poem. I really think you have something special there.

Keep writing :)

[roarke]

such a concise rhyme. so efficient and at the same time worldly. I concur, approved.

[Everett DeValle]

I Love it, because I relate...part Asian, part Spanish and British ancestry...it just resonates with me.

It behooves me at times, when we assimilate, that we are Americans, yet we still have to categorize as such in our ethnicity...it saddens me, at times, and at times, I prove that we are just as equal...that we are all Americans, yet its not reality.

3 stars and the sun, for me at least, in my heart...Thank you for sharing a wonderful write in rhyme, whimsical yet nostalgically poignant.

[Dane Osborne]

I once thought that truth could be found by books fillled with jargon

I once thought that freedom could be found in translating what was lost.

But then....I got smart and stopped buying what everybody was selling. I'm just a finite being in a finite world in the middle of an infinite flow of cause and effect.

The only thing we ever created that made sense was love and even that may not have a damn thing to do with truth.

[Siddhartha]

Loved the way you articulated it.... A well-rounded mind is always better than a well-filled one. Be what you are...Thank you.

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yes..perfectly said..love the opening lines..always hold on to who you are..that is something noone can take from you..