Pyrotechnics

Claim me for your own

Your words of us

Exhausted by separation

Distilled by longing

Extinguished by reaction

Your words of us

empty

Floating in vaporous territory  far away

where they trudge knee-deep,

dip into barren covenant

where it is too deep to stand

too shallow to dive

Reach Out!

Dip me into those

Fireworks, was it?

that you swear by at the brush of our lips.

Your endless love has limits

in a land where oxygen suffocates,

Fire does not ignite

Much less bursts colors beyond this horizon

Ostentatious cries of Contrast with this

Horrible, Horrible Earth.

(Much less its nature be that, a love like ours)

you drop my hand,

run to another universe

to point me to

"Where We Are"

...where we're not 

Reach out. 

For my hand, and not

Forever

We can tour eternity casually

Our moments' gallery

never a still life. 

Start a dripping puddle of Everclear

and take our Hearts for a dip. 

Reviews

[Collect-Eye]

amazing. this has a lot of poise and clarity
for a journey such as this I don't think these skills could have
used any more effectively
well done

[Dane Osborne]

Honey allow me to let you in on a little secret. 100 years from now, we will both be remembered in the same status as Dylan Thomas, Keats, and Rimbaud.

I'll be remembered as the weird and brooding reclusive type and you'll be known as the pretty one that made all the heads turn :)

The poem itself was like a lament for the folly and chaos that comes with such passion. The lament was eloquent on the outside but I could tell there was unrelenting fire under the surface.

Right now your words are like an atomic bomb but one day I believe they will be like a nuclear holocaust.

Well done.....seriously, well done.

[Siddhartha]

stings, bites and soars with a proud intensity.the skill and dexterity with which emotions are dressed make them seem one's own silhouettes in the dark...

[Everett DeValle]

Wow, wonderful, beautiful, poetic art.

[OT]

oh yes!! this is brilliant!! the language is simple but captivating - you weave through the images "trudging knee-deep" to borrow your phrasing!! I love the name - and the second stanza in particular - "fire does not ignite" in lands of no oxygen!! barren land - it all links and swirls perfectly! a favourite!! nice!

[Michael.]

"Much less bursts colors beyond this horizon
Ostentatious cries of Contrast with this
Horrible, Horrible Earth."
I liked those lines alot.
I also like the structure of how you put it together.
But the lines "you drop my hand,
run to another universe
to point me to
"Where We Are"
...where we're not."

Seemed awkward to me for some reason.
Over all really good. :)

[roarke]

fireworks...meh.
Now meteoric, that's something....

Depth reflects the shallow in a contemptuous sneer.
passion mocks the insincere.

like a meteor, time to pass into another universe, there's always other places that need light.

Lots of complexity and passion here, intriguing stuff. To know the artist, you have to hold the hand that holds the brush.

[Robin]

an intricate weaving of emotion , dynamic writing of the highs and lows of the heart in love ... powerful stuff Everclear

[MandaBear]

It's so beautiful. ... I just can't find the words.

[Everett DeValle]

You are artistic in so many ways...I love the delivery, word play, analogies, intermingling in your poetic artistry. And nothing last forever...sadly. Excellent write.