Honest question. How are you not a professional writer?!
This poem is filled with so much emotion, and it really makes the reader feel, and that is one of the main keys to poetry. you're use of vocabulary and everything fits in so well with the poem, and makes it more fluent, and graceful. It's well paced, and overall a really good read!
A word of advice...I can see that you wanted to put emphasis to 'I see you.' Another way you can do that, is my putting it on another line, or stanza. Maybe even indenting it to the right, or putting italics on it. You don't have to follow it, since it is poetry and there really are no rules to poetry.
Really good job!
Posted 6 Years Ago
2 of 2 people found this review constructive.
6 Years Ago
I've only written a few things I guess is why I say I'm not a professional write. I never took any c.. read moreI've only written a few things I guess is why I say I'm not a professional write. I never took any classes or anything I just like to put what I feel in my own sort of worded way. I only have a few more things I've written I am working on getting on here. I am glad you enjoyed it though and thank you for what you said
It's chilling how much I was able to relate to this poem. Definitely a high standard for this site, since it is the first one I've read. Fantastic writing :)
Honest question. How are you not a professional writer?!
This poem is filled with so much emotion, and it really makes the reader feel, and that is one of the main keys to poetry. you're use of vocabulary and everything fits in so well with the poem, and makes it more fluent, and graceful. It's well paced, and overall a really good read!
A word of advice...I can see that you wanted to put emphasis to 'I see you.' Another way you can do that, is my putting it on another line, or stanza. Maybe even indenting it to the right, or putting italics on it. You don't have to follow it, since it is poetry and there really are no rules to poetry.
Really good job!
Posted 6 Years Ago
2 of 2 people found this review constructive.
6 Years Ago
I've only written a few things I guess is why I say I'm not a professional write. I never took any c.. read moreI've only written a few things I guess is why I say I'm not a professional write. I never took any classes or anything I just like to put what I feel in my own sort of worded way. I only have a few more things I've written I am working on getting on here. I am glad you enjoyed it though and thank you for what you said
I see light penetrating through the darkness.
I see beauty in the chaos, I see the intoxicating effect of laughter and smiles.
There's an echo in the darkness I hear and feel.