Mar de Sombras

Mar de Sombras

A Poem by Yes
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This is a better title than before, but it's in Spanish... I don't like it in English... well, what to do?

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Graceful it leaps,
Bounds and dances.
Beautiful it watches,
Long and Lankey,
Slim and Slender.
Happiness radiates
From its epicenter,
Natural and Good
 
I am the opposite,
With no grace or poise,
Beauty has not graced
My face.  Slim and
Slender I am not.
Happiness is an emotion
I have never known.
 
My shadow loves life
Like I do not.

© 2009 Yes


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Yes
any better title suggestions?

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I really like the juxtaposition of the subject and their shadow. The first part I was wondering what it was exactly that you were writing about until the very end, a nice touch on a sad poem.

Oh and, as far as a title goes, you could maybe have it as Shadow in another language? Sombra is shadow in spanish so maybe that? I dunno, unless you wanted the shadow element to be unknown until the end. Just an idea =]

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I really like the juxtaposition of the subject and their shadow. The first part I was wondering what it was exactly that you were writing about until the very end, a nice touch on a sad poem.

Oh and, as far as a title goes, you could maybe have it as Shadow in another language? Sombra is shadow in spanish so maybe that? I dunno, unless you wanted the shadow element to be unknown until the end. Just an idea =]

Posted 15 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.


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