I just noticed you had more to read. My review however would fall flat, since so many have already said it all. I will simply say I found this beautiful and leave it at that.
we see what we want to see sometimes... it isnt until we are alone and we fall victim to our own thoughts of logic and reason that we start to see the truth. Great piece.
Nicely done. Good structure and visual appeal. Your words create and communicate the emotions of passion, pain, loss, and emptiness. If given to the person to which it is directed, I think it might have been received as 'venom poetry,' poetry designed to hurt. Sad but done well. Thanks for sharing this.
Such deep thoughts,its odd when your with someone all seems fine, but when apart you face the truth
that it is not.
It's probably nothing,
But my nagging heart wishing,
That I could have what I've been missing.
I love the flow and emotion behind your words, a nagging heart is talking ..........knowing that things are
not all well really...........lovely strong piece, loved it!
So well said... when there is something lacking in a relationship you feel such a deep emptiness and it makes everything else in the relationship begin to fail like a domino effect... thats when it's time to break free before your spirit is broken.
I am a singer/songwiter and self proclaimed poet. I sing for a band in the western mass. area called Independent Idiot (if you wanna ask what that means contact me and I'll tell you).
I have been .. more..