Numbers

Numbers

 

I hate numbers I really do.

No not because I suck at math.

 

The grades I get.

Some girl in line?

 Just a girl born in the year 1999.

 Or one of the 7 billion people on the earth

 

Just a number

That’s all I am

Just a number

That’s all I’ll ever be

 

The numbers on my future tombstone

The seconds of my existence that pass by

The numbers that I dial at an old payphone

Chased by numbers until I die

 

Just a number

That is all I am

Just a number

That’s all I’ll ever be

 

Does it matter in the end?

We are just persons

That are numbers

At the end.

 

 

Author's Note

feedback and tips are always welcome , also if you notice some grammar mistakes please tell me ,
i would like to improve my writing and english so just say it when you notice a mistake
thank you

Reviews

[closed]

In one way it seems that you are agreeing with what you've written
But their is a duality that implies that numbers is the only way the world views us

We are filed, organized and kept track of systematically by the system itself
And its the only relevant thing about our lives from a legal standpoint


Anyhow

This was awesome




-Dream

[theshygirl]

thank you dream

[dexterous sam]

hey check out my poems ....and reviews are welcomed ,especially constructive..plz

[dexterous sam]

hi there it is your feeling ..a well versed poetry number's confusion in life is pretty ordinary issue but difficult to tell else marvellous ..a piece of art

[Jesse]

You are so very right. Numbers, numbers, numbers...even letters are really numbers. Sometimes I wonder that the Mayan Concept of 010101 (which is how the computer was figured out) gave us a message as well. Atoms that's what we are in the millions and that's a number. Loved the poem it took a concept and built on it. Flows good too.

[Lyric]

You're are really wonderful writer :-) great poem

[Ben Noah Suri]

It is only when we are misled by the illusion of reality that we fall for the numbers. You have realised that you are a person or should I say, a soul. Your emotions and your thoughts by their very nature tell us that numbers do not matter.

[Beccy]

If we were just a number, the exquisite curves of a Rodin sculpture, the intricacy of Rachmaninov's third piano concert, (just as two examples,) would never have been birthed; neither would poetry; an art which in my view brings forth all that is inside us, and is the ultimate form of communication.

Poetry, by its very nature is subjective, so your words must at least reflect something of how you feel; and as a teenager, I recall having the same kind of thoughts. Time though, has a way of showing us that we are all special, all have something to give; and of course, the hand that made us would never accept that we are just a number.

The grammar and punctuation is of little account by the way, that comes with practise; the most important part of writing poetry is the ability to communicate your thoughts to the reader.

Beccy.

[Zoomout]

You are not just a number , you are a great writer

[theshygirl]

Thank you so much :)

[Perkele.7885]

We all go by a name. Something that we call ourselves to differentiate us from some of the other people on this earth but, most certainly, not all of them. Whether it be a name or a number or a color or a series of all three or whatever, it is something that we as individuals are comfortable calling ourselves to set us apart from other people, even some who call themselves the same thing. Some of us like to stand out while others of us like to blend in. Now, me, I like to have a name that is very easily forgettable.

[Cool Girl]

Awesome! I really like it.. It made me think, and I actually see your point :)

[theshygirl]

Thank you cool girl :)

[Cool Girl]

You're welcome :)