so done

So done

 

I guess I never knew you at all.

Because who expected you to say all this s**t.

you were the first one who broke through my wall.

I am the one with the broken heart.

Just admit.

And I am just so done.

 

So done with your words that hurt.

So done with you foolish opinion.

So done with you pretending to know me.

I am just so done

So done with you.

 

Since when are you the one telling me how I need to act?

How I need to react to this messed up situation.

You have changed, but it is still true.

Opposites attract.

Just like we did.

I still feel a hollow space right near my heart, would that be a logic explanation.

 

Still I am just

 

So done with your words that hurt.

So done with your foolish opinion.

So done with you pretending to know me.

I am just so done.

So done.

With

You

 

Reviews

[Adam Adams]

Very heartfelt poetry. It's always seemed in love (such heartbreaks... ) when two people're loved at first sight & then get winded up with another. Sometimes, I think, love's nothing more than a leaf or a poetry of infatuation that's only longed to have for "one-night", but when I look ov'r the world, I find, Oh, historian art's no fake where true lovers treasured the value of faith in love. However, I believe modernity has changed everything around so, having heartaches in love's seemed very common across the land of love / hearts. Sounds pretty good. You write very deep stuffs.

"I still feel a hollow space right near my heart.. "

You may write this line in this way either, if you're interested in:

"I still feel a hollow space right INSIDE my heart... " It impacts the depths. Anyway, your line's also very cool. Keep writing!

[theshygirl]

thank you again ! so happy that you give me these tips! because i try to describe my feelings in poetry but i am dutch and to express that in english is some times hard so i am happy with this positive feedback , yes i wrote this when i was heart broken.

[Adam Adams]

It's all my pleasure to get you hi-cups of realism (positivism through words). Btw, I like "dutch" beauty's. They're quiet shy, simple & very kind-hearted by nature so, it's kinda worthy enough to be around their beautiful hearts... to put 'em mend if they're broken.

Love brings everyone broken - life not to hurt you or break you down to bare knees, but to let you see and face what the realism of life's 'bout. So, let yesterday walk into the dune of winds & welcome what today brings to you. Always smile.

[theshygirl]

very well said

[Richard🖌]

Hi, Shy!
You've certainly blown-off some steam here, and having rid yourself of such a cad, who could blame you?

Well spoke, with loads of angst and emotion, excellent words choices of expression throughout, too, your poetic skills are quite interesting, and definitely entertaining.
The format of your Free Verse poem could be more well-constructed, punctuation better placed to tell the reader when to pause, to stop, for the lines to run-on, or not, and be mindful of capitalizing where unnecessary; for ease of reading and appeal to the mind's eye, Free Verse seldom reads good centered. This deeply emotional piece deserves a more interesting and powerful presentation … for example:


So done

I guess I never
knew you at all,
because who expected you
to say all this s**t!

You were the first one
who broke through my wall.

I am the one
with the broken heart.
Just admit …
and I am just so done.

So done
with your words that hurt.

So done
with your foolish opinion.

So done with you
pretending to know me.

I am just so done …
so done with you.

Since when
are you the one
telling me
how I need to act;
how I need to react to
this messed-up situation?

You have changed,
but it is still true —
opposites attract,
just like we did.

I still
feel a hollow space
right near my heart …
would that be a logic explanation?

Stil,
I am just so done
with your words that hurt.

So done
with your foolish opinion.

So done
with you pretending
to know me.

I am just so done.

So done
with
"You!"


Here's hoping my efforts have offered you a bit of insight in writing the Free Verse, Dear Lady-Poet.
I sincerely have enjoyed how your poem made me feel, how it reached-in and touched the tender, compassionate softness of my poet's heart and soul … bless you with happiness, and no moire of this disappointing hurt.

I hope you learned your lesson about falling for bad boys; thanks for sharing You with Us … smiles 'n hugs! ~ Rascal

[theshygirl]

Thank you so much Rascal !
I defenitly going to use this ! I have to make an art portofolio and wanted to perform this , so i am so glad that you helped me out.
Do you have any other tips how i could perform this
I dont want to exaggerate in my acting etc. A little is fine i guess
Or should i be exaggerate?

Thank you so mucj for this revieuw
And yes i learned my lesson , falling for the badguy ends most of the time with a broken heart
But i guess every love story does some day

Again thanks,
Lisa

[Richard🖌]

I like your ideas, Lisa, and I do not think you've overly exaggerated at all.
I offered pretty much all I could for you.
I am always available, though Lisa, anytime you feel you need a helping hand. ;)

It's nice to know your real name, too! ~ Richard

[Robert]

Vary passionate piece from the heart. You are writing a lot since you started W.C. Keep them coming. Good job.

[ANTO]

Theres so much hurt and anger - so much pain but also so much denial.
I feel it would be impossible to get so close to them without getting to know them - the real them - at least in part, which makes me consider that 'done with you pretending to know me' is denial.
The repetition of the phrase 'so done' is sad in a way that is contradictory, I feel - there is much truth in the phrase 'the lady/man doth protest too much' - and this is what 'so done' made me feel.

I love the style of the write and the choice of font.
I liked this one.

[theshygirl]

thank you so much :)

[D.T.]

It's a nice piece talking about something that isn't so nice and it's really good.

[theshygirl]

thank you so much :)

[Cameron]

Beauty and tragedy are often nigh one in the same. I like the structure of this to in my opinion drive home the thoughts themselves as their own separate pieces of an even larger picture. Well done miss.

[theshygirl]

thank you so much cameron :)