Fabricated Faith

Fabricated Faith

A Poem by The Shrew

A death, a cry, a whisper, a tear
Oh Lord, please tell me are you truly here
We beg, we pray to see a better day
Oh Lord have you left us, or have you never been here

Your daughter, your son ,your neighbourhood friend
Blinded by the lies being fed to their open hands
Im born, I'm alive and I'm soon to die
Only to have lived a life created by lies.

© 2015 The Shrew


Author's Note

The Shrew
*UNFINISHED*
This is just a draft, definitely needs a good clean up, but let me know what you think so far!!

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It is a complete poem. You could add the who,why, when, where and how of the poem. Made a epic thoughts.
"Im born, I'm alive and I'm soon to die
Only to have lived a life created by lies."
The above lines above did say enough. Thank you for the excellent poetry.
Coyote

Posted 9 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

The Shrew

9 Years Ago

Oh wow, thank you very much !!
Coyote Poetry

9 Years Ago

You are welcome.



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Beautiful I should say.. I hope you have the answers to your questions illustrated in this poem

Posted 9 Years Ago


Nicely summarizes many of the problems in the modern church.

Posted 9 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

The Shrew

9 Years Ago

Thank you!! Im glad this was communicated through the piece!
You definitely possess the eye Shrewmeister ;)

Posted 9 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

The Shrew

9 Years Ago

hahahah thanks
another great piece ,, keep the good work

Posted 9 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

The Shrew

9 Years Ago

Thanks!! :)
Salem

9 Years Ago

:) .......................
This is very good and thought provoking. I also love its creative title

Posted 9 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

The Shrew

9 Years Ago

Thank you!!
a really poetic message that seems to be centered on faith

the spiritual aspect really lends this poem weight


Posted 9 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

The Shrew

9 Years Ago

Thanks you!
There is a resonating truth that keeps vibrating through these words. Each time I read it I feel my lungs fill in with a heavy weight that all is not what it seems to be. There are strings that hover above you, him, her, them and me.. I feel like a puppet held together by faith, what is the meaning of this faith, now that's what you've made me contemplate. Great write.

Posted 9 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

The Shrew

9 Years Ago

Thank you very much for the feedback! :)
It is a complete poem. You could add the who,why, when, where and how of the poem. Made a epic thoughts.
"Im born, I'm alive and I'm soon to die
Only to have lived a life created by lies."
The above lines above did say enough. Thank you for the excellent poetry.
Coyote

Posted 9 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

The Shrew

9 Years Ago

Oh wow, thank you very much !!
Coyote Poetry

9 Years Ago

You are welcome.

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Added on August 16, 2015
Last Updated on August 17, 2015
Tags: Religion, God, Christianity, Faith

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The Shrew

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