Modern Day Cinderella

Another Saturday morning
Has awaken to greet me
Yet I feel the urge to roll over
In my bed and go back to sleep.

As the dreams of last night
Play in my mind
Of perfectly tailored dresses
And expensive Italian leather shoes.

Treated by one and all
As the faerie tale princess
On her way
To the Royal Ball.

Where I dance
With my Princess Charming
Whom sweeps me
Off my feet.

Unlike Cinderella
There are no step-sisters
Or cruel step-mom
Waiting for me.

As the bell chimes twelve
I rush to wake up
Before the dream ends
In a nightmare.

To the sound
Of Her royal servants
Knocking on
My front door.

Presenting
On a purple crush velvet cushion
An expensive leather shoe
Like the one I owe.

Oh this cannot be real
Such things only happen
In faeries tales
Told to amuse kids.

Please let this true
My wildest dream
Is really
A reality to me.

Accepting the offered shoe
As if manna from the Goddess
From up high above
In my trebling hands.

Scared
It will disappear
When I blink my eyes
For a second.

Gingerly
Placing the shoe
Before my left foot
As I step into it.

Hearing a gasp
As my foot fits perfectly
From the Royal attendant
As she hastily bows to me.

“Ma’am
The Royal Princess await
Your appearance
This afternoon”.

Before I heard
A cellphone being answered
In the background
Confirming the shoe fitting.

As several more attendants
Rushed forward
Gathering some clothes
Along with myself.

Taking me
To meet
My Princess Charming
In Her palace.

And who said
Faeries tales are dead
Not I
That’s for sure.

Reviews

[Tina Louise UK]

Beautifully done hun, enjoyed :) x

[therisa]

Thank you, Tina.

[Benita-Staebell M - Kin..]

very nicely penned and a different
look at Cinderella Fairy Tale I loved it
BRAVO!


Another Saturday morning
Has awaken to greet me
Yet I feel the urge to roll over
In my bed and go back to sleep.

As the dreams of last night
Play in my mind
Of perfectly tailored dresses
And expensive Italian leather shoes.

Treated by one and all
As the faerie tale princess
On her way
To the Royal Ball.

Where I dance
With my Princess Charming
Whom sweeps me
Off my feet.

This will go into my Favorites
I love Cinderella and many others.



Blessings. Benita

[therisa]

Thank you, Benita. Am glad you have enjoyed this poem.

[Benita-Staebell M - KindredPoet]

you're welcome. :)

[MomzillaNC]

An interesting spin on the Cinderella tale.

NOTES: I think you should give this another editorial pass for corrections. For example, in the line "Whom sweeps me," it should be "Who…"

[therisa]

One more reason, I need an editor, Momzilla. I can't see these typing errors, of mine.

[MomzillaNC]

I do understand that. But, I believe, as you develop, you will see them better. I didn't go into more detail because I feel you should attempt an edit of your own first. The more you look for those edits, the better you will become at seeing them. My sister, whom I told you once before suffers from Dyslexia, found several small errors I'd missed in one of my recent writes.

You can do this, Therisa. You'll only keep getting better for the trying.

[therisa]

I hope so, Momzilla. I got too many memories of being frustrated, because I couldn't see the errors that you and other have kindly pointed out, to me. Mostly, of the red ink kind, from teachers and profs.

[MomzillaNC]

Teachers and professors frequently are too harried to take the time to be more gentle in their guidance. If I can provide such guidance, I'm honored to be so valued. However, I would be remiss if I only ever told you the errors and never encouraged you to try to see them for yourself.

[therisa]

Like your sister, I do find it easier to edit others, than myself. I think, I'm too close, to see the "trees", from the forest. As part of my learning disability, I see the missing word or letter, when I read something, and don't realize it, until someone points it out. Sadly, spellchecks won't point this out, unless I have mispelt the word.

[MomzillaNC]

Turn on your grammar check. And, my sister says it helps her to break things down line by line. See what you can do to edit the piece. Then, post the edited version and send me another read request. It will help to post your edited version below this one so I'll have them to compare.

[therisa]

Sadly, Gmail doesn't have a grammar checker. Or one that I can find.

[MomzillaNC]

Are you composing in Gmail? Doesn't your system have a word processor like MS Word, Mac Pages?

[therisa]

Generally, I will compose my poems, on paper, before transferring them, to net, on my gmail account. And yes, the library has MS Word, but I don't like use it. Had issue with formatting errors, when transferring, between programs.

[MomzillaNC]

Well that's easy to fix. When you finish your composition and edits, "Save As" text (txt) or rich text format (rtf).

[therisa]

Thank you, Momzilla, for the tip.

[NoelHC]

If you have a gMail account you have access to Google Docs as well, and can compose using it, and then save as .txt or .rtf as Momzilla suggested. This will allow you to archive your work on Google Drive.

[NoelHC]

Sorry, link to Google Docs. It has a spell checker, but no grammar tools. https://docs.google.com/

[MomzillaNC]

That's a great idea, Noel. My son uses Google Docs all the time.

[therisa]

Noel, Google Docs is now, called Drive, and I do use it. Thank you, for your helpful suggestion.

[MomzillaNC]

Duh! I knew that too. My son is always at my head trying to convince me I should be using Google Drive and keeping a back up of all my stuff there.

[MomzillaNC]

He's so insistent. I've begun tuning it out. LOL

[therisa]

Children can be like that. LOL.

[NoelHC]

Therisa, you are correct, I use it rarely and forgot about Drive. I back up all of my stuff a few places, the "Cloud" is not my preferred mode though. USB stick, storage on a European e-mail account, removable hard drive, and a couple of computers. Talk about wearing suspenders with a belt!

[therisa]

Noel, I got enough paper notebooks flying around my apartment, my cats are using them, as a place to sleep on. Seriously, given the way, technology is changing, I perfer to use the cloud, as USB stcks can become dated and no longer be able to use, by current computers, like the floppy disc.

[NoelHC]

Certainly storage media becomes outdated, but it evolves slowly so you can always transfer to a newer media before the old is redundant. My concern about the cloud is the fact that my stuff is out of my control. When does free storage become your data is hostage until you pay the storage owner?

[therisa]

Good question, I don't know, but wish I did.

[OT]

nice!! a very emotive piece spinning around fairy tales!!

[Midnight_Mystery]

Another nice emotion filled poem...great job Therisa!

[Samuel Dickens]

In a fairy tale setting, you express very well the desires and doubts that many of us have experienced when we wanted something so badly. There are a few small errors, ie "grasp" instead of "gasp", etc, but you could easily iron those out.