Bird's Trill

Let's slow dance

Once

I poured my heart

Into his hands

Overflowing

For now

Let's just bask

In the afterglow

of the setting sun

And- Slow dance

To the bird's trill

We're the only ones

Who hear its desolate song

Author's Note

I love listening to The xx when I write

I dont have many words. Will you still like me? :c

Reviews

[Relic]

A good poem but your first stanza is vague. Who's hands? Each beginning line is capped except for one. The ellipses seems unnecessary and interrupts the flow as does the separation of the two particular stanzas.

I do like the idea behind the poem though. "we're the only ones who hear its desolate song" is a great ending and captures the contentment and safe feeling in the speakers voice.