Why Daddy

i was never daddy's little girl although i never hated him for that, the more he pushed me away the more i was drawn to him, the more i craved for his fatherly love, but still i wait here patiently to

Why Daddy?

Daddy why don't you love me?
Is it because i look more of 'her'?
Is it because i am a reminder of what has gone and will never return?
Everyday i see a father hold his daughter dearly, 
With so much affection and love,
And then i look at us.
Is there even an 'us' anymore?
Was there ever an 'us' to begin with?
Why daddy why?
Why must you push me away?
Cant you see daddy? i'm hurting too,
I smile for the sake of you, reminding you that i'm here,
That i'm here to share your grief with and morn over our lost,
But why daddy why?
Why must you scorn at me with such raw hate?
Cant you see daddy our numbers will never add up
You lost one.....................................
But I've lost two.

Reviews

[Linda]

I am sorry and hope that the relationship between you and your father reconnect soon. Me and my dad had our differences but i still love my father dearly. Although now we are not in the best speaking terms. I will always respect him because no matter what he will always be my father.

[The Realist]

dont be, its not your fault, cherish what you have with your father even on bad terms, believe me.

[hcarson]

this is so sad..especially the line ''our numbers will never add up, you lost one but i lost two..'...so real for so many that are also experiencing this. i don't understand how a parent can act like this..its alien to me. i hope you and your dad manage to find that bond and make this a thing of the passt fofr you both. well done on this heatfelt, open piece of poetry

[The Realist]

That was the one line that broke me the most..... and im glad that my experience is 'alien like' to you, because i can only pray for what you have.... i hope me and my father will grow a bond someday :(, thank you Hcarson.

[hcarson]

Maybe write him a letter, saying exactly how you feel...maybe it will break through to him?....i really hope you manage to fix things and feel happier soon, theis is so sad :(

[The Realist]

A letter?? Words mean nothing to him, well coming from me will only go through one ear to the other, i really hope so too, thank you so very much hcarson.

[Urja Gokani]

amazingly written keep it up :)

[The Realist]

Thank you:)

[Urja Gokani]

welcome :)

[tossedpenny]

Are the typos intentional, to make it seem more like a letter written by a child to their Daddy? It definitely adds to the feeling of innocence and is more in sync with the narrator's tone.

I felt that the level of maturity fluctuates, with it starting out more child-like, and becoming progressively more mature and even philosophical. Also, it makes me wonder what era the child and father are from. Feels more 20th century, since a child won't easily use words like "must" in "Why must you push me away" or "grief" in "share your grief".

I like the poetic touch in the last two lines especially. I feel that this poem can be greatly improved with a few edits, though as always, it's really up to you how you want to do it.

Very emotive and a strong sense of backstory. I like it.

Good luck and keep writing!

[The Realist]

yeah, they were intentional, its in a child-like voice at first showing her innocence, then takes a turn to a child whom was exposed to the cruel reality of the world way to early.
the character is blessed with two parents, but both of whom do not want her, so obviously the child had to grow up real mature in order to defend and look after herself.
The era based has nothing to do with this whatsoever.
if i made any changes to it then it wouldn't be considered my personal experience but a sugar coated version of it.
so thank you for your personal opinion of improving my history, but i kindly decline it.
i just wanna thank you for reading and reviewing my work.

[J Todd Underhill]

Great write here, and so true of some relationships today. I hope it's not autobiographical. This would translate well into spoken word art.

[The Realist]

Im grateful for your review J Todd Underhill :) really i am, but in all honesty this poem is me. hence why this one is very personal to me. i cried when i was inking it out, i just had to let it out or my father would've lost 2........ im sorry if this is to depressing for some but this is the only way for me to slowly open the tight lid bottle of mine...

[mou]

It is painful and a pathetic demand only to get love up to a limit that heart wants.
Pain is pronounced but love crosses it more.
A sentimental write!
Thanks for sharing.

[The Realist]

No thank you mou, for reading my work and for reviewing it too :)

[Coyote Poetry]

Powerful, honest and direct words. I felt the struggle leading to the sad ending. Thank you for sharing the amazing poetry.
Coyote

[The Realist]

No i thank you for taking the time to read my poems.

[Coyote Poetry]

Was my pleasure and you are welcome.

[J. J. Nightingale]

This touches deep ... this rings true .. in just a few lines, we feel your emotions... your heart ..
and your loss..

Well done..

Jazzy

[The Realist]

Thank you so much Jazzy that means alot.

[J. J. Nightingale]

You are welcome......and... Welcome to the Cafe.....J.

[Chris]

Coping with loss is real... and while many understand - the dealing isn't easier. You gave a good depiction... and the hurt-full aftermath.

[The Realist]

yes, loss is a dreadful thing but having to deal with the pain alone is almost unbearable.

[Barbara Walker]

This is heart-wrenching to read. You bring out the questions in this girl's heart with a sad innocence with your words. The ending is a kick in the gut. Just my opinion but for a long time I have thought that society hasn't a clue of the importance of a father or father figure in a girl's life. She will use this yardstick to measure the men in her life and if she has no measuring stick, the results are usually chaos, drama and looking for love in all the wrong places.

[The Realist]

Very true indeed. ive never been daddys' little girl, so i know how it feels to have a father, but i cant really call him MY father. does that make sense???

[Barbara Walker]

yes. I have to post 10 characters

[The Realist]

Lol yeah i noticed that..... :)