Show Me

Paint me a picture and sing me a song

Show me the critic who sees things all wrong
Cut me a rose then show me its thorn

Sharp and green as my patience is worn

tell me I’m wrong in my gentle thinking

Tell me I’m seeing through eyes unblinking
Tell me I absorb far far too much light
To know this from that at first sight
And I, my dear friend, will surely PROVE you wrong
And forth I will run to take up arms and ring the gong
Which will echo and echo and echo some more
And delicately the raven will come a’ tapping at your door
Unnaturally he’ll grin, with his long blackened beak
And naturally you’ll cower, playing shy and meek
Afore his friend sparrow flutters gently to his side

At this point my dearest friend, you are along for the ride

Reviews

[bluessadmood]

This was so nice ,very creative,strange and unique in structure and sight
you never know what you see ,you paint what you like and sing for me
tear me to pieces i waited for long,tell me i am wrong and thinking disturbed
i see with straight eyes ,i feel too much light,so you think me not so right
i really loved the sequence of thoughts,i cant dissect all the beautiful words
will take me long ,but i loved it all the way ,i see something different and very nice here
really loved it all ,well done
lovely write..

[GTVile]

Very good. Way to inspire people to pick themselves up by their bootstraps and keep on truckin'.

[siri]

this was amazing. you make poetry seem easy. the flow of this piece seemed like it was born with time itself. Brilliant . thanks for sharing

[Senseless whatever]

Really like the power of emotion in this one. Feeling intensify as the this piece progresses taking the reader on a ride, as you say. Great imagery and flow throughout. Marvelous write.