Underwater Fire

Flaming water rises and falls
Glistening bright orange with its fiery waves

A flame of emotion
Pure lover's lust
Burning bright
With undying trust

Feelings that blaze
Like solar flares
Leaving your mind in a haze
And pronouncing a dare

A dare to fall
Straight into their arms
To let go of it all
and give into their charms

A charming smile
And a warm embrace
worlds hide beyond a profile
Of their beautiful face

Give into the fire
Let it take you away
Let the flames carry you higher
To a better day

A day where the blazes
Shiver and dance
Let loose from their cages
To pull you into their trance

So listen and see
As your heart takes over
Come back to me
And hold me closer......

Reviews

[Gregory H.]

My biased opinion...This was great...the picture you painted was one of romance

My unbiased opinion...
This was a great poem...It was choppy though...The flow was pretty good though It just need a little work on flow...otherwise great job...9.7/10

AA
Gregory

Very cool. Mixing of emotion and visuals comes across pretty well. Easy idea flow to follow.

[Senseless whatever]

Deep, interesting, leaves me to wonder??????

[Sharkapillar]

Different for you, but fantabulous. I think this is my favorite, it's so beautiful and vivid. Great imagery. Good job ^_^
~Blessed Be~