Ink contradiction

another spur of the moment item from the dark recesses of my mind

This infliction
its all i feel
Fact or fiction?
Is this real?
Your words are a contradiction
will i ever heal?
Loves last game
Your devious crime
Such a shame
But this heart is all mine
with its bruises and blood
crude stitches and all
such a pity for you
you'll never see me fall
walk away from this place
go and shake your head in denial
don't let me see your face
or that oh-so charming smile
Once you leave
It will all be fine
I'll weave another story
Line by line
This time though
I'll leave you out
Take away the words
That your character would shout
Sew up his mouth
Turn his black heart inside out
Leave him with nothing
But the black ink of his name
if only my stories could be reality
such a shame......

Reviews

[Jeff Bresee]

I write most of the time in rhyme, and it is hard to do without coming off cheezy. However, that is all of the challenge. You have done a great job hear of both rhyme and flow to get across the point in a way that makes me smile...and relate.

Great job.

[Taylor H.]

loved your word chooses and rhythms this was a great poem. :)

[Wolfe Greytome]

A pretty good piece. Well written, delightful flow.

[Sharkapillar]

I love this, with a deep, burning, Hot Topic passion. It reminds me of a paranoid schizo, switching betwean its alter egos. It's beautifully sinister, just the title catches eyes. Amazing job. ♥
~Blessed Be~