Greys overs sunshine

Too much observation.

There is an ocean over my head,
an ominously calm azure
quietly brewing storms
in the wake of grainy sun rays
embracing it like its shore;
it rumbles some days
cracking tesla strikes
across the expanse of muddy mist
and greying smoke of adulterated hopes
clouding over a shiny day,
it dazzles those arcs of anger
of deeds it witnesses,
in angst of bereaved gratitude
it is never been showed by eyes
that only turn to it
when it reeks of danger.

Author's Note

A raw made free verse of what the rain showed me a few days ago. Really glad to be back here after a long time, I hope I was missed as much as I did lol.

Reviews

[Amy R]

The poem explores the theme of hidden turmoil beneath a façade of calmness.
It personifies the ocean as a metaphor for the emotional and psychological struggles that often go unnoticed until they manifest as danger or turmoil.

Language choice used is very rich and imagery as well. Phrases like "cracking tesla strikes" and "greying smoke of adulterated hopes" evoke strong sensory responses.

This poem is a reminder of the importance of recognizing signs of distress in oneself and others.

Thanks for sharing such powerful poem, (u were missed) I recently came back after some weeks to, to post and review as well.

Have a great weekend.
-Amy

[Poetic_Vixen]

Aye, you straight up warmed my heart there >.< I have been taking time and getting whipped with stuff at my end that poetry was kept second, it's turning out dull but I'm going with it and dm slowly coming back, will back to read you soon and would love to because I know I have missed out on a lot. Really glad to see you Amy, the review on my poem puffed up my pride and I was truly glad to learn that you felt the right senses of this poem's depths. I'm very grateful to you ❤️

[Amy R]

Awww, I know how life can be same here, poetry was kept second,
You're welcome,
Glad I had such positive impact on you,
Nice to hear from you to..
Keep well..🤗🤗
See ya!

[Poetic_Vixen]

It is always lovely to hear from you. It means so much my friend and you look really pretty ❤️

[Amy R]

You've been missed, I was worried but glad to see you're back.. thank you and Keep good.💜

[Poetic_Vixen]

Aye it truly warms my heart to see this sweet message my sweet friend ❤️ I am back and am slowly catching up on reading so many lovely poems you and all my other lovely friends have written.

[Amy R]

Hugs... thank u for that, I have some of them to catch up on too.

[Ken Simm.]

Atmospheric to the nth degree.

[Poetic_Vixen]

Haha, I'm overjoyed to hear this remark. So grateful for taking to read it sir!

[Betty Hermelee]

The sky and the ocean have moods just like we do…..and you portray this collage of inner pain, yet there is some hope…. I love your observations of the ocean, the angry sky ( which mimics your disposition) …..your perception of the celestial is only noticed when people look at it….. when it’s raging, otherwise it may go unnoticed…..”….an ocean over my head” is quite revealing….. to me it speaks of terrible suffering you are enduring……a well thought out piece my friend with clear images ………warmly
B🌷🌷

[Poetic_Vixen]

Ah this review was so thoughtful my friend, every detail brought out and well related and though I was writing it with a rainstorm at display, I'm quite thrilled to see you related it to my inner predicament which I realise feels very accurate, I'm so grateful for this amazing review Betty, you have made this poem more special ❤️

[Marie]

Wow! First, I wish to say WELCOME BACK, dear P. V... You have been sssssssssssoooooooooo missed, my dear friend and it is a great joy for me that you have returned after too long a spell away! (((HUGS))) I love this allegorical gem which is filled with various figures of speech, I particularly love the alliteration and personification. Filled with remarkable visual detail, the poem is poignant to read because storms were slowly brewing which would bring torrential rain and create clouds which would block the sunshine. So finely inked I could almost hear the thunder in the distance. I pray that this emotional weather finally disappears and that the sun comes shining through in your life once more, bringing great joy and happiness to you, my dear friend. You have been in my thoughts and prayers and so happy you have returned to your poetic home again. A huge WELCOME BACK again to you, dear P. V... Superb write, I so enjoyed reading, and thank you so very much for sharing, dear poetess...

[Poetic_Vixen]

My heart swelled double I believe as I reach the last lines of this lovely review, you have no idea how much your words assure me and make me feel right at home, and to learn that you have thought of me so heartfully seriously touches the depths of my heart. I wish you nothing but so much happiness and love my friend, you are so dear a possession to the hearts you keep and I will never forget your kindness ever. These words mean so much to me, I'm so very grateful to them Marie! You have made a beautiful meaning out of my poem and it gives me a lot of encouragement to keep going. This makes me so happy my dear friend ❤️

[Marie]

Bless you, dear P. V... For your beautiful response, I have no words to adequately thank you, my dear friend. Wishing you too, only the very best of everything always, my dear friend and the site feels more like home now that you are back again! There was a big empty space that nothing or nobody could fill until you returned, dear P. V... Be happy and blessed always, my lovely friend ❤️

[Poetic_Vixen]

Nothing else is gonna make my day brighter than this response, oh! I will ever be grateful to you for giving me such a place that won't replace anyone with it, this literally made my day my dear friend. Always wishing you the best and sweetest of warmth and blessings to never last my dearest friend ❤️

[Marie]

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