Greys overs sunshine

Too much observation.

There is an ocean over my head,
an ominously calm azure
quietly brewing storms
in the wake of grainy sun rays
embracing it like its shore;
it rumbles some days
cracking tesla strikes
across the expanse of muddy mist
and greying smoke of adulterated hopes
clouding over a shiny day,
it dazzles those arcs of anger
of deeds it witnesses,
in angst of bereaved gratitude
it is never been showed by eyes
that only turn to it
when it reeks of danger.

Author's Note

A raw made free verse of what the rain showed me a few days ago. Really glad to be back here after a long time, I hope I was missed as much as I did lol.

Reviews

[Amy R]

The poem explores the theme of hidden turmoil beneath a façade of calmness.
It personifies the ocean as a metaphor for the emotional and psychological struggles that often go unnoticed until they manifest as danger or turmoil.

Language choice used is very rich and imagery as well. Phrases like "cracking tesla strikes" and "greying smoke of adulterated hopes" evoke strong sensory responses.

This poem is a reminder of the importance of recognizing signs of distress in oneself and others.

Thanks for sharing such powerful poem, (u were missed) I recently came back after some weeks to, to post and review as well.

Have a great weekend.
-Amy

[Poetic_Vixen]

Aye, you straight up warmed my heart there >.< I have been taking time and getting whipped with stuff at my end that poetry was kept second, it's turning out dull but I'm going with it and dm slowly coming back, will back to read you soon and would love to because I know I have missed out on a lot. Really glad to see you Amy, the review on my poem puffed up my pride and I was truly glad to learn that you felt the right senses of this poem's depths. I'm very grateful to you ❤️

[Amy R]

Awww, I know how life can be same here, poetry was kept second,
You're welcome,
Glad I had such positive impact on you,
Nice to hear from you to..
Keep well..🤗🤗
See ya!

[Ken Simm.]

Atmospheric to the nth degree.

[Betty Hermelee]

The sky and the ocean have moods just like we do…..and you portray this collage of inner pain, yet there is some hope…. I love your observations of the ocean, the angry sky ( which mimics your disposition) …..your perception of the celestial is only noticed when people look at it….. when it’s raging, otherwise it may go unnoticed…..”….an ocean over my head” is quite revealing….. to me it speaks of terrible suffering you are enduring……a well thought out piece my friend with clear images ………warmly
B🌷🌷

[Marie]

Wow! First, I wish to say WELCOME BACK, dear P. V... You have been sssssssssssoooooooooo missed, my dear friend and it is a great joy for me that you have returned after too long a spell away! (((HUGS))) I love this allegorical gem which is filled with various figures of speech, I particularly love the alliteration and personification. Filled with remarkable visual detail, the poem is poignant to read because storms were slowly brewing which would bring torrential rain and create clouds which would block the sunshine. So finely inked I could almost hear the thunder in the distance. I pray that this emotional weather finally disappears and that the sun comes shining through in your life once more, bringing great joy and happiness to you, my dear friend. You have been in my thoughts and prayers and so happy you have returned to your poetic home again. A huge WELCOME BACK again to you, dear P. V... Superb write, I so enjoyed reading, and thank you so very much for sharing, dear poetess...