Greys overs sunshine

Greys overs sunshine

A Poem by Poetic_Vixen
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Too much observation.

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There is an ocean over my head,
an ominously calm azure
quietly brewing storms
in the wake of grainy sun rays
embracing it like its shore;
it rumbles some days
cracking tesla strikes
across the expanse of muddy mist
and greying smoke of adulterated hopes
clouding over a shiny day,
it dazzles those arcs of anger
of deeds it witnesses,
in angst of bereaved gratitude
it is never been showed by eyes
that only turn to it
when it reeks of danger.

© 2024 Poetic_Vixen


Author's Note

Poetic_Vixen
A raw made free verse of what the rain showed me a few days ago. Really glad to be back here after a long time, I hope I was missed as much as I did lol.

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The poem explores the theme of hidden turmoil beneath a façade of calmness.
It personifies the ocean as a metaphor for the emotional and psychological struggles that often go unnoticed until they manifest as danger or turmoil.

Language choice used is very rich and imagery as well. Phrases like "cracking tesla strikes" and "greying smoke of adulterated hopes" evoke strong sensory responses.

This poem is a reminder of the importance of recognizing signs of distress in oneself and others.

Thanks for sharing such powerful poem, (u were missed) I recently came back after some weeks to, to post and review as well.

Have a great weekend.
-Amy


Posted 3 Months Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

Amy R

2 Months Ago

You've been missed, I was worried but glad to see you're back.. thank you and Keep good.💜
Poetic_Vixen

2 Months Ago

Aye it truly warms my heart to see this sweet message my sweet friend ❤️ I am back and am slowly.. read more
Amy R

2 Months Ago

Hugs... thank u for that, I have some of them to catch up on too.



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Atmospheric to the nth degree.

Posted 3 Months Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

Poetic_Vixen

2 Months Ago

Haha, I'm overjoyed to hear this remark. So grateful for taking to read it sir!
The sky and the ocean have moods just like we do…..and you portray this collage of inner pain, yet there is some hope…. I love your observations of the ocean, the angry sky ( which mimics your disposition) …..your perception of the celestial is only noticed when people look at it….. when it’s raging, otherwise it may go unnoticed…..”….an ocean over my head” is quite revealing….. to me it speaks of terrible suffering you are enduring……a well thought out piece my friend with clear images ………warmly
B🌷🌷


Posted 3 Months Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

Poetic_Vixen

2 Months Ago

Ah this review was so thoughtful my friend, every detail brought out and well related and though I w.. read more
Wow! First, I wish to say WELCOME BACK, dear P. V... You have been sssssssssssoooooooooo missed, my dear friend and it is a great joy for me that you have returned after too long a spell away! (((HUGS))) I love this allegorical gem which is filled with various figures of speech, I particularly love the alliteration and personification. Filled with remarkable visual detail, the poem is poignant to read because storms were slowly brewing which would bring torrential rain and create clouds which would block the sunshine. So finely inked I could almost hear the thunder in the distance. I pray that this emotional weather finally disappears and that the sun comes shining through in your life once more, bringing great joy and happiness to you, my dear friend. You have been in my thoughts and prayers and so happy you have returned to your poetic home again. A huge WELCOME BACK again to you, dear P. V... Superb write, I so enjoyed reading, and thank you so very much for sharing, dear poetess...

Posted 3 Months Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

Marie

2 Months Ago

Bless you, dear P. V... For your beautiful response, I have no words to adequately thank you, my dea.. read more
Poetic_Vixen

2 Months Ago

Nothing else is gonna make my day brighter than this response, oh! I will ever be grateful to you fo.. read more
Marie

2 Months Ago

❤️~~~~❤️~~~~❤️
The poem explores the theme of hidden turmoil beneath a façade of calmness.
It personifies the ocean as a metaphor for the emotional and psychological struggles that often go unnoticed until they manifest as danger or turmoil.

Language choice used is very rich and imagery as well. Phrases like "cracking tesla strikes" and "greying smoke of adulterated hopes" evoke strong sensory responses.

This poem is a reminder of the importance of recognizing signs of distress in oneself and others.

Thanks for sharing such powerful poem, (u were missed) I recently came back after some weeks to, to post and review as well.

Have a great weekend.
-Amy


Posted 3 Months Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

Amy R

2 Months Ago

You've been missed, I was worried but glad to see you're back.. thank you and Keep good.💜
Poetic_Vixen

2 Months Ago

Aye it truly warms my heart to see this sweet message my sweet friend ❤️ I am back and am slowly.. read more
Amy R

2 Months Ago

Hugs... thank u for that, I have some of them to catch up on too.

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Added on August 17, 2024
Last Updated on August 17, 2024
Tags: Poetry, sky, metaphors, dark, gloom, rain, thunderstorms, love, pain

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I'm an ardent lover hidden within the deep confines of my maturity, a lover of poetry and expressing deep meanings in the most mundane observations. Clearing out the mist crowding my soul and peekin.. more..

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