Candles and ashes

For the givers of love and those who live its legacy.

The candle softly melted
at its flame's gentle sway;
somewhere
the matchstick lies,
ashen
with the last of its smoke swirls
still tasting of fire it licked
that doused it whole.

Oh, love of scented seconds
filling the room,
its borrowed love
taking over each of its nooks,
carrying more of its warmth,

some of us burn for love
while most of us
burn till the last of it.

Author's Note

Some very keep observations there. Better than overthinking anyway hah!

Reviews

[AYVID N]

A beautiful analogy of the candle and matchstick, both burning for live in their own unique ways. I loved the vivid imagery of the softly burning candle at the behest of its gently swaying flame and the matchstick that licked fire, to set alight the flame. You have such a fabulously creative mind! Reading your words makes me feel that we all leave our own, special legacy of love. Another great and very memorable poem from you, dear Muskaan.
💐🙋‍♀️❤️

[Poetic_Vixen]

I was living each of the experience of the matchstick that was burned to light a flame to lend it to candle wick and the candle that respectfully and gently carried its warmth that it was sacrificed for and I'm glad you took the relation of this analogy with that of us human lives as it was intended. So lovely to hear from you always Divya, I'm very grateful for these words ❤️

[AYVID N]

As I said before, your use of imagery is unique and delightful. It just convinces me about poets being born and not made. You're such a bright example!
Its such a pleasure to read and review you! You're most welcome, dear Muskaan. 💕

[Poetic_Vixen]

I wonder and sorta believe I got still lengths to go to reach this huge title of 'being born a poet' as I often felt disconnected from my poetic spirit that it seems non existence sometimes :') but to hear it from you, this praise is an such an honour and encouragement for me to keep evolving into writing that I love by heart. It is such a pleasure to have you here as a reader and it is such joy to read you Divya ❤️

[Coyote Poetry]

A wonderful poem for the dance of love dear poet.
"Oh, love of scented seconds
filling the room,
its borrowed love
taking over each of its nooks,
carrying more of its warmth,"
I adored the above lines. In life we shall learn. Sometimes we loan and borrow kisses. Thank you for sharing the amazing poetry. I did enjoy.
Coyote

[Poetic_Vixen]

Grateful for this insightful review fellow poet! Glad you enjoyed reading!

[Coyote Poetry]

I did enjoy. A wonderful poem dear poet.

[Marie]

I love how the poetess opens the poem with the matchstick giving up its life in order to give life to the candle through lighting it. The visual detail in the poem is very impressive as the poetess flecks the most amazing pictures for her reader through excellent word choice. Like the little matchstick most of us burn for love right to the very end. Beautiful poem, dear P.V. I love the title too, it drew me in to read it, as I also love candles and had just blown my two lighting since early morning, out before reading. Lovely work! Thank you for sharing, dear poetess...

[Poetic_Vixen]

This review is so dear to my heart! You have looked closely into these two objects I presented here and I love it, your understanding to it is perfect, candles I believe have a very classical artistic vibe, they burn, filling corners like old times softly melting bit by bit, they're mostly romantic with their cadence, how it compliments a literary mood, I'm glad you could feel this poem dearest Marie! Your review has overjoyed me and am happy you felt the need to read this poem, so very grateful to you for these lovely words and taking your time out to read me! Have lovely and sweet day, my friend!

[Marie]

Most welcome always, dear P.V. Though in prose, your reply is as poetic as your beautiful poem. You truly are an artist with words. Wishing you a very lovely, blessed day also, dear friend...

[Poetic_Vixen]

Ah! That just made me smile! I can't be grateful enough my friend!

[Marie]

Bless you, dear P.V. and thank you again for sharing...

[Thomas W Case]

Tremendous imagery. You make this come to life.

[Poetic_Vixen]

So grateful for this!

[Ookpik]

Ah what a refreshing read - I'm reminded of a smudging, and am left with a pleasant sense of incense and smoke.

You've done an incredible job with theme here, and the notion that the brightest fires burn fastest certainly comes to mind. Very well done.

Though it might be a bit pedantic, there are some spots in the final two lines of the first stanza that bug me a bit. The metering catches me for some reason, but I can't put a thumb down as to why. Anyways, offered here just as suggestion:

"...still tasting of *the* fire it licked
*that'd* doused *its length* whole."

Regardless, really lovely work here - hoping this review is received constructively.

-Ook

[Poetic_Vixen]

Ah, surely, the meter may but a bit but hey I think that's the beauty of poetry, and the suggestion, yes I highly praise it and as much as I had thought of adding those details myself while I was writing this, I I believe it rather scrambles the poem with too much details, hence we keep it vague, sorta incomplete for the readers to sense it with their own preference. Regardless of all that I appreciate your suggestion and would work on the meter thing next time.

And I'm glad you liked this poem and felt the details of the setting here, I'm very grateful for these words ❤️

[Ookpik]

Oh I wouldn't worry about counting meter all that much - just because I nitpick here or there doesn't mean you're obligated to alter your voice. I'm glad you'd opt to carry it your own way. : )

Thanks for sharing!

[Poetic_Vixen]

It means a lot. And I welcome these constructive suggestions, gives one new ways to interpret thoughts

[Ookpik]

That's my view too, still, writers can be sensitive and I find its better to preface then to unnecessarily offend.

Glad it was received well, as much so the conversation. I'll keep an eye out for more of your stuff. A pleasure reading!

[Poetic_Vixen]

Very happy to know! Sending you warmth ❤️