You took it All

Spring 2016

I closed myself off from people because I didn't want to get hurt, but you earned my trust and pulled me out of the darkness that I made for myself. When I had next to nothing, you gave me hope. You became my main source of my happiness, comfort, and peace.

And then you moved on to someone else, and you took all of it with you.

Reviews

[William Liston]

Being that this is very short, it's kind of hard to leave a constructive review on this, but I'll do my best.

First of all, I must applaud you on how you structured the ideas in this poem. It really gave the last sentence the climatic impact that I think you were going for.

You obviously don't lack in the emotional sense, meaning that you seem to put feeling behind your work. But the problem is conveying that emotion in a way that the reader can feel it. I'd critique this poem in more depth, but I must first know what your goal in poetry is. In other words, what are you trying to achieve with your poems? Are you just trying to release your own emotions or are you trying to immerse yourself into the depths of the craft? Are you writing just for fun, or are you trying to achieve greatness in your works? I must know what your goal in poetry is before I critique this.